dialogue thought

emissary · Post by **emissary** » Tue Sep 27, 2005 12:50 am

Wow! I always thought Cochise told Rembrandt, "Don't break any action."
When Rembrandt suggests getting back to union square. Now I think he actually is saying, "A little break in the action." Meaning they're taking a break from their trip home.

Cochise · Post by **Cochise** » Tue Sep 27, 2005 1:17 am

...What's the question? Are you just typing your thoughts here?

And yeah, he says "Little break in the action", seeing as they've had to run from gangs and police the whole night...

emissary · Post by **emissary** » Tue Sep 27, 2005 9:26 pm

Sorrrrry! And by the way, its, "When we get there, that's when we've made it."

Cochise · Post by **Cochise** » Wed Sep 28, 2005 11:30 pm

Actually, mine is grammatically correct, as "When we get there" is an independant clause leading up to "that's when we made it", so the semicolon separates them. Although the sentence itself isn't grammatically correct, as it changes from future tense to past. Dialogue doesn't need to be grammatically correct, though.

But no problems, I was just really wondering how you wanted a reply...

emissary · Post by **emissary** » Thu Sep 29, 2005 2:00 am

Grammar is very important to me. However, I was referring to the line spoken by Swan. He doesn't say "...we made it." He says, "...we've made it." You are correct with regards to the semicolon.

Cochise · Post by **Cochise** » Thu Sep 29, 2005 3:54 am

Ah, I see. Yes, I was wondering about that. I might change it if I get around to it. Otherwise, makes it sound more "street" for now.

Cochise · Post by **Cochise** » Thu Sep 29, 2005 4:12 am

Fine! I've changed it. Sorry for the misunderstanding; I've had people argue over the semicolon, but not two letters and an apostrophe...

Anyways, I noticed I may have come off a bit rude in my posts, so you'll have to forgive me. I've been sick, and a little irritable, but that is no excuse to be getting on other Warriors' cases!