Ajax: 20 years later
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Thats unique when you decided to dress the two as pizza boys in order to get in the mansion. Great thinking!
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I agree. Great creative mind!!!! I can't wait for the next part!!! Good work, Cowboy is cool!!!Baby Bear wrote: Thats unique when you decided to dress the two as pizza boys in order to get in the mansion. Great thinking!
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if there was one word to describe this it would be AWESOME
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Cant wait for the next chapter Cowboy Is Cool its a great story.
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Thanks for all the feedback, everyone!
Don't worry, this story isn't done, I'm working on the next chapter right now. Just wanted to let everybody know it's still on.
Don't worry, this story isn't done, I'm working on the next chapter right now. Just wanted to let everybody know it's still on.
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Cool cant wait man i really want to see this pan out
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Chapter 4: The Job
Jack Dupree and Ajax sat in Dupree's car, driving toward the Parkreiner mansion after getting ready for the job. They were both dressed in their pizza boy uniforms. Dupree had his gun and Ajax had his knife, but little did they know how bad things were gonna get that night. They rode in silence, both mentally preparing for the job, in case it would go wrong. The drive was about 15 minutes. Finally, they reached the mansion. Dupree stopped the car and put the keys in his pocket, turning to Ajax. "You ready for this?" Ajax nodded. "Hell yeah." They both climbed out of the car, which was parked behind a large tree to conceal it.
Ajax had been holding the pizza boxes on his lap, and he now gave one to Dupree and kept one for himself. Inside were their weapons, since they couldn't conceal them with the pizza uniforms. Dupree walked up to the intercom and pressed a button. "Dominoes Pizza" he said, depressing the button. A minute later, the large iron gate slowly opened, allowing the two inside. They walked up the winding walkway which lead through the huge and beautiful yard, filled with statues and pricy lawn furniture. They finally reached the front door. Dupree knocked, and they both stood there waiting for the door to open.
It opened only a second later. The man who answered it was Jason, one of Parkreiner's bodyguards. "Where the f*ck have you been? You're 15 minutes late! I'm not paying full price for these!" Ajax shrugged. "You don't have to." In the blink of an eye, he dropped the pizza box and gave Jason a right hook to the jaw, stunning him. He followed it up with a left hook directly to the face, dropping him to the floor. Ajax knelt down and took his knife out of the pizza box. He plunged it into Jason's heart, taking his life away. Dupree pulled out his revolver and stepped into the house.
"Nice work. Let's head out around back. The bodyguards have their own little hangout back there, they'll probably be there." Ajax nodded, clutching the knife tightly. "Let's f*ck them up!" They exited out the front door and circled the house, to the backyard. There was one bodyguard sitting by the back door, but he was out like a light. Dupree looked at him. "That one's Spike. Looks like he's out cold. I'll take him." He quietly climbed onto the back porch and snuck toward the snoozing guard, gun in hand. When he reached him, he took the gun and smashed his nose in, waking him up. Spike, blood shooting out of his nose, jumped up, screaming with tears running down his face.
Dupree picked up the stool Spike had been sitting on and broke it over his head, making him fall to the ground, unconscious. Dupree signaled for Ajax to come up with him. "That was good too." Ajax said, spitting on Spike. "Let's go to their hangout." Dupree said, jumping down from the porch, Ajax following. Little did they know that the third bodyguard, Ace, had seen the whole thing and was climbing into his car right now to exact revenge. They were almost at the hangout door when Ace started the car up, the headlights nearly blinding Jack and Ajax. They looked over, wondering what the hell was going on.
It was too late. The car sped toward them, and there was nothing they could do. "Ah, f*ck." Ajax said, seeming to accept what was about to happen. The car slammed into both of them, and it was nasty. Ajax just bounced off the windshield, cracking it, and rolled off onto the ground. But Jack got it alot worse. He was hit so hard he rolled up over the hood, onto the roof, back down onto the trunk, and then onto the ground, cracking his head off the pavement. Warm blood coursed down his head. Ajax was holding his back, in alot of pain. "F*ck!" he yelled. Dupree simply lied there on his stomach, seemingly unable to move.
Ace climbed out of the car. "You f*cking assholes are history, you hear me?!" he yelled, cracking his knuckles and neck. Once Jack heard this, he knew that he had to at least try to get up. And he did. He sat up, feeling where his head had hit the ground. Oh, phew. It was bleeding, but it wasn't cracked open like he had thought. He was still weak though. Ajax had already stood up. Both of them had lost their weapons when they were hit by the car. And now it was fighting time. Dupree stood up, looking at Ace. And just like that, Spike stood up, regaining consciousness.
He was bleeding from his nose still, but he was p*ssed off. Ajax looked at him. "I'll take that faggot. You take the driver." Ajax walked calmly over to Spike as Dupree limped over to Ace, hoping to God he could pull this off. He was caught off guard right away, as Ace grabbed Jack and threw him against the side of the car. He advanced on Jack, but Jack shot his leg out and kicked him in the stomach. He than tackled him to the ground. Unfortunately, his head hit the ground where it was bleeding from, stunning him. Ace stood up and grabbed Jack by his collar, punching him three times in the face. It seemed Jack was out.
Ace walked toward Ajax, hoping to help Spike in their fight, but Jack caught him by surprise. He bolted up and slammed Ace into the car, kneeing him in the stomach. When Ace doubled over, Jack kneed him in the face twice, breaking his nose and some of his teeth. Jack tried to punch him in the face, but Ace blocked the swing and punched Jack instead. Uh-oh. This sent Jack into a rage. He punched Ace three times in the face, each punch hard and fast as hell. Ace punched Jack in the stomach. This was it. One more chance to knock him out, or else Jack would be a goner. He used his brain. He was doubled over right now. As he stood up, he uppercutted Ace in the jaw, knocking him out and sending him falling into the side of the car.
He had won, but he was bleeding everywhere. All the while that was happening, Ajax and Spike were fighting. "Come on, you p*ssy!" Spike said, holding his fists out in a fighting stance. "F*ck you, faggot!" Spike, fast as hell, punched Ajax in the nose, but Ajax quickly retaliated and punched him in the stomach so hard blood came out of Spike's mouth. Ajax swung, but Spike dodged and kicked Ajax in the kneecap, causing him to drop to the other knee. Spike kicked him in the side, dropping him to the ground completely. SH*T!, Ajax thought. This guy must have known kung fu or some sh*t. Spike lept in the air, trying to land on Ajax's head. But Ajax rolled out of the way, and Spike's foot hit the ground so hard his ankle snapped. "F*ck!" Spike screamed, falling to the ground.
Ajax got up to a crouching position, looking down at Spike. "F*ck you." He grabbed Spike's head and slammed it into the ground, over and over and over. It must have been at least 20 times. Finally, Spike's head couldn't take it anymore and it split. Ajax stood up, blood on his hands and face. He walked over to Jack, who was holding his head. "Sh*t, what happened to you? You alright?" Dupree nodded. "Yeah, after the job is done, I'm headed to the hospital though." Ajax nodded. "Let's go." Jack picked up his revolver from the ground. They walked back into the mansion, both of them pretty banged up. "Alright, Parkreiner is in his bedroom upstairs, protected by the 4th bodyguard, Tina. We have to go up there and get him the hell out of here." Ajax smiled. "A girl bodyguard? She hot?" Jack looked annoyed. "That's the last thing you should be thinking about right now!
Ajax laughed, causing blood to squirt out his nose, which made Jack laugh. "It's never a bad time to think about wool." Jack sighed. "Well, either way, you might be killing her, so does it really matter?" Ajax shrugged. "Let's just go." They walked up the stairs. They were in way too much pain to be sneaky anymore. The stairs led up to a long hallways, with large double doors on either end. Dupree looked down both ways. "It's to the left. Let's go." They went down the left path, noticing that absolutely nobody was in sight. They finally reached the double doors. Jack held his revolver tightly.
"Let's go." He slammed the door open, letting Ajax run in first. Little did Jack know that Tina was sneaking up behind him right at that moment. Ajax looked at Parkreiner, jaw dropped.
"Cochise?"
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Jack Dupree and Ajax sat in Dupree's car, driving toward the Parkreiner mansion after getting ready for the job. They were both dressed in their pizza boy uniforms. Dupree had his gun and Ajax had his knife, but little did they know how bad things were gonna get that night. They rode in silence, both mentally preparing for the job, in case it would go wrong. The drive was about 15 minutes. Finally, they reached the mansion. Dupree stopped the car and put the keys in his pocket, turning to Ajax. "You ready for this?" Ajax nodded. "Hell yeah." They both climbed out of the car, which was parked behind a large tree to conceal it.
Ajax had been holding the pizza boxes on his lap, and he now gave one to Dupree and kept one for himself. Inside were their weapons, since they couldn't conceal them with the pizza uniforms. Dupree walked up to the intercom and pressed a button. "Dominoes Pizza" he said, depressing the button. A minute later, the large iron gate slowly opened, allowing the two inside. They walked up the winding walkway which lead through the huge and beautiful yard, filled with statues and pricy lawn furniture. They finally reached the front door. Dupree knocked, and they both stood there waiting for the door to open.
It opened only a second later. The man who answered it was Jason, one of Parkreiner's bodyguards. "Where the f*ck have you been? You're 15 minutes late! I'm not paying full price for these!" Ajax shrugged. "You don't have to." In the blink of an eye, he dropped the pizza box and gave Jason a right hook to the jaw, stunning him. He followed it up with a left hook directly to the face, dropping him to the floor. Ajax knelt down and took his knife out of the pizza box. He plunged it into Jason's heart, taking his life away. Dupree pulled out his revolver and stepped into the house.
"Nice work. Let's head out around back. The bodyguards have their own little hangout back there, they'll probably be there." Ajax nodded, clutching the knife tightly. "Let's f*ck them up!" They exited out the front door and circled the house, to the backyard. There was one bodyguard sitting by the back door, but he was out like a light. Dupree looked at him. "That one's Spike. Looks like he's out cold. I'll take him." He quietly climbed onto the back porch and snuck toward the snoozing guard, gun in hand. When he reached him, he took the gun and smashed his nose in, waking him up. Spike, blood shooting out of his nose, jumped up, screaming with tears running down his face.
Dupree picked up the stool Spike had been sitting on and broke it over his head, making him fall to the ground, unconscious. Dupree signaled for Ajax to come up with him. "That was good too." Ajax said, spitting on Spike. "Let's go to their hangout." Dupree said, jumping down from the porch, Ajax following. Little did they know that the third bodyguard, Ace, had seen the whole thing and was climbing into his car right now to exact revenge. They were almost at the hangout door when Ace started the car up, the headlights nearly blinding Jack and Ajax. They looked over, wondering what the hell was going on.
It was too late. The car sped toward them, and there was nothing they could do. "Ah, f*ck." Ajax said, seeming to accept what was about to happen. The car slammed into both of them, and it was nasty. Ajax just bounced off the windshield, cracking it, and rolled off onto the ground. But Jack got it alot worse. He was hit so hard he rolled up over the hood, onto the roof, back down onto the trunk, and then onto the ground, cracking his head off the pavement. Warm blood coursed down his head. Ajax was holding his back, in alot of pain. "F*ck!" he yelled. Dupree simply lied there on his stomach, seemingly unable to move.
Ace climbed out of the car. "You f*cking assholes are history, you hear me?!" he yelled, cracking his knuckles and neck. Once Jack heard this, he knew that he had to at least try to get up. And he did. He sat up, feeling where his head had hit the ground. Oh, phew. It was bleeding, but it wasn't cracked open like he had thought. He was still weak though. Ajax had already stood up. Both of them had lost their weapons when they were hit by the car. And now it was fighting time. Dupree stood up, looking at Ace. And just like that, Spike stood up, regaining consciousness.
He was bleeding from his nose still, but he was p*ssed off. Ajax looked at him. "I'll take that faggot. You take the driver." Ajax walked calmly over to Spike as Dupree limped over to Ace, hoping to God he could pull this off. He was caught off guard right away, as Ace grabbed Jack and threw him against the side of the car. He advanced on Jack, but Jack shot his leg out and kicked him in the stomach. He than tackled him to the ground. Unfortunately, his head hit the ground where it was bleeding from, stunning him. Ace stood up and grabbed Jack by his collar, punching him three times in the face. It seemed Jack was out.
Ace walked toward Ajax, hoping to help Spike in their fight, but Jack caught him by surprise. He bolted up and slammed Ace into the car, kneeing him in the stomach. When Ace doubled over, Jack kneed him in the face twice, breaking his nose and some of his teeth. Jack tried to punch him in the face, but Ace blocked the swing and punched Jack instead. Uh-oh. This sent Jack into a rage. He punched Ace three times in the face, each punch hard and fast as hell. Ace punched Jack in the stomach. This was it. One more chance to knock him out, or else Jack would be a goner. He used his brain. He was doubled over right now. As he stood up, he uppercutted Ace in the jaw, knocking him out and sending him falling into the side of the car.
He had won, but he was bleeding everywhere. All the while that was happening, Ajax and Spike were fighting. "Come on, you p*ssy!" Spike said, holding his fists out in a fighting stance. "F*ck you, faggot!" Spike, fast as hell, punched Ajax in the nose, but Ajax quickly retaliated and punched him in the stomach so hard blood came out of Spike's mouth. Ajax swung, but Spike dodged and kicked Ajax in the kneecap, causing him to drop to the other knee. Spike kicked him in the side, dropping him to the ground completely. SH*T!, Ajax thought. This guy must have known kung fu or some sh*t. Spike lept in the air, trying to land on Ajax's head. But Ajax rolled out of the way, and Spike's foot hit the ground so hard his ankle snapped. "F*ck!" Spike screamed, falling to the ground.
Ajax got up to a crouching position, looking down at Spike. "F*ck you." He grabbed Spike's head and slammed it into the ground, over and over and over. It must have been at least 20 times. Finally, Spike's head couldn't take it anymore and it split. Ajax stood up, blood on his hands and face. He walked over to Jack, who was holding his head. "Sh*t, what happened to you? You alright?" Dupree nodded. "Yeah, after the job is done, I'm headed to the hospital though." Ajax nodded. "Let's go." Jack picked up his revolver from the ground. They walked back into the mansion, both of them pretty banged up. "Alright, Parkreiner is in his bedroom upstairs, protected by the 4th bodyguard, Tina. We have to go up there and get him the hell out of here." Ajax smiled. "A girl bodyguard? She hot?" Jack looked annoyed. "That's the last thing you should be thinking about right now!
Ajax laughed, causing blood to squirt out his nose, which made Jack laugh. "It's never a bad time to think about wool." Jack sighed. "Well, either way, you might be killing her, so does it really matter?" Ajax shrugged. "Let's just go." They walked up the stairs. They were in way too much pain to be sneaky anymore. The stairs led up to a long hallways, with large double doors on either end. Dupree looked down both ways. "It's to the left. Let's go." They went down the left path, noticing that absolutely nobody was in sight. They finally reached the double doors. Jack held his revolver tightly.
"Let's go." He slammed the door open, letting Ajax run in first. Little did Jack know that Tina was sneaking up behind him right at that moment. Ajax looked at Parkreiner, jaw dropped.
"Cochise?"
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COCHISE!!!?? 
Awesome! Can't wait for the next part, great work. 
Awesome! Can't wait for the next part, great work. What about me? I got the big one...
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Absoloutly Fantsatic!
I really did not see the whole Cochise thing coming??!?!
Dying to see what AJax will do.
I really did not see the whole Cochise thing coming??!?!
Dying to see what AJax will do.
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Awesome chapter man great twist cant wait for the next chapter.
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you see this face i actually made that face when I read that
so many questions that need to be answered i cant wait for the next installment CIC
i actually made that face when I read that so many questions that need to be answered i cant wait for the next installment CIC
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COCHISE!!!!! msn i do love this story ,josh please continue soon
[url=http://imageshack.us][img]http://img223.imageshack.us/img223/6373/20255849yq4.jpg[/img][/url]AND THATS THE BOTTOM LINE BECAUSE PAPA ARNOLD SAYS SO!!!!!