A LA gang universe.........

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A LA gang universe.........

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This story was given great thought, and three films inspired me to write this: A Scanner Darkly, The Warriors, and Zodiac, and please forgive me, as parts of the story will be in Nonlinear format (chapters may sometimes be in Non-chronological order)... This will be an ongoing series, and I will update it as often as I can. Each chapter will come in sections, as their are two different sets of characters ( or perhaps three), so there is a reason that each update may be short.

Anyway....

Chapter One—Section one

Things were not explained as they should have been. It was not a terrorist attack, it wasn’t the act of a cruel group, all will be explained……

The street kid lay silently in the shadowed area of a gutter, governed by a rather large tree. He was not innocent, nor mischievous. He had done bad things, but received an even bigger punishment. Karma overreacted, rendering him homeless, alone, with no trace of family at all. And it got worse…

People arrived, juvenile delinquents in a group of four. They began to ridicule the young street boy. Laughing with tears of joy, as the kid shed tears of pain. The child’s entire life was being mocked and he just hoped that these others wouldn’t approach or harm him. The ‘others’ showed off their rather dull vest, that represented their so-called ‘firm’. A group of young men and women, who feel they need to be the elders, be in charge, people who need that power. A police squad would be doomed to face over one-hundred members of a gang, who are hungry for control. They could not be stopped.

The group began to surround the homeless kid. They continued to laugh as one of them began to beat up on him, his elbow colliding with the child’s face, blood and saliva shot from his mouth, a tooth dropping to the ground like the shell of a bullet. The others joined in kicking, and beating the kid.

A tall one, perhaps the leader of the small group removed a gun from his dirty jeans, a small black snub-nose revolver, a beauty in itself. The young kid jumped at the site of the gun. ‘Oh, I ain’t gonna shoot you yet, kid’, he bellowed, switching the gun around, so the but of the gun was facing forward. He leapt aggressively on top of the young child and began beating his nose. Flesh and warm blood fell, as the poor boy’s face became deteriorated and he was in pain, screams filled the street as his face was beaten and beaten.

The child begged and begged. And it got even worse. Soon, the group was bored and realized there was almost no un-damaged flesh on the kid’s face. The decided to leave, after the supposed leader, took the gun, and shot at the child. Several bullets entered his torso, ripping open his chest, a final shot to the head, exited with a large amount of brain matter and blood, bathing the street.

The group then fled the scene with little sympathy as they continued to laugh, ‘That kid had it coming’, one of them laughed………

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WOW! :shock:
Thats really good. Movies usually inspire me to write stories. I like this chapter. Its gory though. They kiced the hell outta tht kid. Cool stuff. I feel sorry for him.

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your an awesome writer. its hard to translate gory aspects to writing, but you pulled it off!
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Thnks for the comments so far people, they are really crucial to my writing.. :)
[glow=red,2,300]WARNING[/glow]- This chapter contains a large amount of drug refrences

Chapter One—Section two

The name Gino Larker rang out as a hero to all druggies around the southern areas of LA. He was known to always deliver, for the right price. Gino had serious drug problems, almost knocking on hells door years and months before, when he concurred with a speedball overdose. His life flashed before his eyes, and he realized that drugs were the only thing that kept him sane. So in turn, he retreated back to his old life clinically depressed, with no cause. He had been known to be suicidal, but to some, it was but a myth……

Gino sat arch-backed in the corner of his badly-treated, dirty apartment that reflected his life as something of non-humanity. A failure in his mind, and the promise for tempted teens and low-life citizens, Gino had nothing to lose. He continued to take a large amount of cocaine, and this day, was no different. Same deals, same drugs, same business. Nothing could have gone wrong….

Every day, Gino would load his gun, incase of any set-up during a deal. Gino remembered he had only two deals in mind on that day, as he insufflated the powder through a cut straw. Fifteen minutes later the fix kicked in and he knew he would get a greater effect if he continued to snort the drug, so he continued…

Hours past like minutes, Gino realized it was now or never. So willfully, he locked up the house and left. Upon leaving he spotted his dog, and gently patted it. Its bony body upset Gino, because he knew it was his own fault that he hadn’t been feeding him. However, a second thought ran through his mind ‘f*ck the dog, wasn’t much use anyway’. Gino pushed the dog away, and left without any sympathy.

Gino strolled through his dark neighborhood, his dirty black jacket bounced in the wind, as his fingers delighted, tucked up in the warmth of the jackets sleeves. His long brown hair, typical rock music look, was governed with large glasses that kept his rather girly facial features covered.

When he arrived at the tunnel, in which many of his deals occurred, there was one man waiting. It was a regular buyer, Andy. Andy was a middle age, and of a Hispanic background and seemed to be a good friend of Gino’s. Seemed…..

The buy was going well as Andy recommended that Gino would wait there while he got some money. However Gino knew something was wrong, as he asked, ‘You’re alone right?’ Andy replied ‘yes’. Gino turned and told himself that everything must be ok.

BANG

The sound rang through Gino’s ears as blood flew up from his hand, as a portion of the flesh was missing. Andy had turned around and had begun firing at him. Another stray bullet caused another flesh wound to occur in Gino’s arm. Blood spilled profusely, covering his torso, as he almost slumped to the ground in pain. He screamed in agony, pulling out his gun to defend what’s left of his crummy life.

A projectile fired from Gino’s gun, but missed and reflected onto the tunnel walls. Andy had stopped firing for a second to load his gun. Gino saw this as the perfect time to escape, as he ran awkwardly towards the end of the tunnel. Firing behind him as he ran……..
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Great absolutely great. Not a lot of diolauge, but in a lot of cases I tend to not use dialauge because it isn't as powerful as just writing about setting or emotions. I feel like I am rambling a little so in conclusion you are an amazing writer and I hope you continue with ernest

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