the warriors-a love story chapter 16
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the warriors-a love story chapter 16
hey warriors here is the next update!!:
chapter 16
the hangout
Swan woke up and found himself on the warriors,matted,old red couch, he looked around and saw rembrandt sitting on one of the bar stools looking out of the window onto the wonderous streets of coney...swan said"hey dude what am i doing here?"
"swan what do you mean what are you doing here, dianna and you had a big bust-up last night and you were punched in the nose,lip and you were bleeding and then you came back in here and nearly drank your life away now do you remember"
"oh yeah well what time is it?"
"it's 3 in the morning, you should get back to sleep dude"
"yeah but until i figure out how am gonna get my girl back im gonna have sleep in this dumpy,drafty place"
"oh well thats your own fault"... swan glared at him and angrily replied"well looky-here your in a mood for..what no reason and your shouting at me, well listen up rem i should be the one in the mood my girl just took my son away from me, so what is bothering you so much ah". rembrandt looked and started crying then he explained"my mamma phoned this morning and i dont know how she got the number but she phoned and said she is disgraced by me because when i left my house in bronx i told her i was gonna make her proud and go to art college but i didnt didi and now..well now she's found out and said she's moving back to porta-rico without me!!!", once again swan had made a fool of himself so he went over to him and resurred him he was going to be arite and that he should just move on.. forget her even though he knew that would be hard.swan said"i aint got know where to stay"
"oh you can stay at my place come on i'll show you it, coz i dont think you've ever saw my place before have you"!!
ok folks that was the first part i know its only short but ya know i had a restless night last night and i just wanted to write you some more seen as youse like it so much and i hope you've enjoyed that little part, so until next time adios boppers!! :Dxx
chapter 16
the hangout
Swan woke up and found himself on the warriors,matted,old red couch, he looked around and saw rembrandt sitting on one of the bar stools looking out of the window onto the wonderous streets of coney...swan said"hey dude what am i doing here?"
"swan what do you mean what are you doing here, dianna and you had a big bust-up last night and you were punched in the nose,lip and you were bleeding and then you came back in here and nearly drank your life away now do you remember"
"oh yeah well what time is it?"
"it's 3 in the morning, you should get back to sleep dude"
"yeah but until i figure out how am gonna get my girl back im gonna have sleep in this dumpy,drafty place"
"oh well thats your own fault"... swan glared at him and angrily replied"well looky-here your in a mood for..what no reason and your shouting at me, well listen up rem i should be the one in the mood my girl just took my son away from me, so what is bothering you so much ah". rembrandt looked and started crying then he explained"my mamma phoned this morning and i dont know how she got the number but she phoned and said she is disgraced by me because when i left my house in bronx i told her i was gonna make her proud and go to art college but i didnt didi and now..well now she's found out and said she's moving back to porta-rico without me!!!", once again swan had made a fool of himself so he went over to him and resurred him he was going to be arite and that he should just move on.. forget her even though he knew that would be hard.swan said"i aint got know where to stay"
"oh you can stay at my place come on i'll show you it, coz i dont think you've ever saw my place before have you"!!
ok folks that was the first part i know its only short but ya know i had a restless night last night and i just wanted to write you some more seen as youse like it so much and i hope you've enjoyed that little part, so until next time adios boppers!! :Dxx
Re: the warriors-a love story chapter 16
one word terrrrific
i have a reason, so there fore i am not a rebel without a cause
Re: the warriors-a love story chapter 16
two words. Out Standing
Why am I out standing you ask? Because it was raining and I didn't want anyone to see my tears because your story was so good.
That was a lame joke on my half, but great story
Why am I out standing you ask? Because it was raining and I didn't want anyone to see my tears because your story was so good.
That was a lame joke on my half, but great story
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Re: the warriors-a love story chapter 16
yay rembrandt gets plot points 
liked it and i like where its going *big thumbs up*
liked it and i like where its going *big thumbs up*

Re: the warriors-a love story chapter 16
DUDE YOU SIG IS WAYYYYYYYY TO BIG YOU CAN GET A BAN FOR THAT I THINKRocko wrote: two words. Out Standing
Why am I out standing you ask? Because it was raining and I didn't want anyone to see my tears because your story was so good.
That was a lame joke on my half, but great story![]()
i have a reason, so there fore i am not a rebel without a cause
Re: the warriors-a love story chapter 16
Another good chapter, lady warrior. Man, I feel bad for both Swan & Rembrandt; everything bad in this story always happens to them two, and I can't help but wonder where the two of them go from here. Will Swan go after Dianna & Fletcher, and what's Rem gonna do about his mother going back to their home country, will he go to?
I look forward to seeing the answers to these few questions, and I must say I like how you've portrayed the two characters in this particular chapter especially - even though they've both got big problems on their hands they've got each other's backs, and that's why they're Warriors. Keep it up, lady warrior, I look forward to the next installment.
I look forward to seeing the answers to these few questions, and I must say I like how you've portrayed the two characters in this particular chapter especially - even though they've both got big problems on their hands they've got each other's backs, and that's why they're Warriors. Keep it up, lady warrior, I look forward to the next installment.
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Re: the warriors-a love story chapter 16
ok guys this is the next part of chapter 16:
the next part of chapter 16
the subway
Swan and rembrandt took the train to soho(coz that is where rembrandt live) swan looked at him and asked"how come you live in soho"
"dunno just do i have always like it's arty-feel so thats why i moved there"
"yeah but what about those clown-face's,the hi-hats, dont they ever bother you"
"na coz they kinda get the drift that if thier gonna mess with me,thier messin with the warriors haha those suckers"... and with that they got on the train. as they got in they saw that the ticket warden was coming round for the tickets,he came round to swan and rem and said"tickets please". rembrandt gave him thier two tickets and all the while swan and him were getting stared at by him, swan saw this and explained"you got a problem".. the ticket warden worriedley replied"no,sir,no.. sorry"!! rembrandt laughed as the ticket warden went by and swan laughed too, they talked a little about gang-life and family-life(even though they had bin brothers for a long time,they still didnt know everything about each other) rem asked to swan"so what sort of childhood did you have"
"ahh...well at some degree it was crappy but then again my momma always made sure that i got fed and ya know bathed and that we were safe,i have always lived here, in coney-island so thats how im so used to the place and my father went to vietnam war and he died..ahh i loved my dad he always used to tell me if some of my friends were bossing me around and picking on me...he used to say if he jumped off the brooklyn bridge does it mean you have ha the good,ol,days! so how about you? rembrandt looked at him and said"well my up-bringin was fairly good..i mean it werent the best at times but ya know life goes on, well i was born in porto-rico in spain and my dad was bussiness man-well i say bussiness man i mean a really top lawyer in spain and he had got offered work in america so he went and i was about 6 at the time, we lived in a crummy,little house in the bronx until my dad got his raise and then we moved at a better place in the bronx, with a better house!! my mamma was always loving and my pop well he was the best coz he always had time for me but when i was 10 he died in a car-crash..so yeah my momma fell apart and couldnt cope so for a while-i got sent into care in shitty tremont and then when i was 12 lived with my momma agian and yeah my childhood was ok!!
Rembrandt was looking over swan's shoulder in horror as swan turned around he saw 4 punks were on the train staring right at them!! swan looked and signed as he said to rem"oh no not this agian", he walked up to them and punched one of them in the face the crowd shrieked in horror then the other one jumped on his back and tried to strangle swan then rembrandt came up to the punk on swans back and got his spray can out and sprayed him in the face with it.. the punk cryed out and swan so it his chance to do a round house kick then punched him doing a five-punch-combo, then that punk was knocked out them all of a sudden he saw a punk with a knife going to stab rembrandt so he dived on that punk and grabbed the knife and slit his throat then rem and swan punched one of the windows in and tossed the two remaining punks out,swan and rem went into the back cabin so that hopefully no-one cud get them and to make sure he found a crowbar on the way to the subway elierer and jammed that in the door!! rem said"pheww that was a close one you saved my life..ah jesus christ your bleeding, man" swan looked at his arm and saw that he had a deep cut on his arm(the punk with the knife must of stabbed at him while he was diving at him)
"ahh i'll be fine dont worry, oh i sure hope know one reports us anyways we'll probally be gone by the time they get to the security coz they right up there about 20 cabins away ha the stupid pigs, anyways lets go"
"go where swan we're gonna have to wait until the train stops"
"not nesserceraly, look", he was pointing at a ladder on the outside of the train, rem looked worried and explained"im scarried of heights.. i think"
"just come-on live a little"!! they walked out onto the ladders on the train being careful all the same time and then they climbed on the top of the train and then swan said"ok i know exactly where we are we are near soho so when we come round the corner there is gonna be big feild near the city and we are gonna jump when i say jump...trust me on this ive done it thousand times"..swan looked at him panicky but trustly at the same time, rem so that they were coming through the tracks near the feild" swan focused and shouted"jump right NOWWWW AAHHH" and they landed safely on the feild they stared at each other and rembrandt just belted out saying"im alive..im alive wohoo" and they started laughing then they talked as the were walking near the town of soho!!
When they got there they went to 53rd street where there was a block of apartment's, rem said"this is it" and they went into a door then up 5 flights of stairs and then they went to rembrandts apartment.
ok guys this is the end of part two but i will be doing another part-part 3 coz im going be ending this in chapter 17 so i need to be able to write as much as i can..and yeas chapter17 will be long,really long or if not i might leave it until chapter 18 but we'll see and i hope you've enjoyed this part of chapter 16, and adios boppers!!
the next part of chapter 16
the subway
Swan and rembrandt took the train to soho(coz that is where rembrandt live) swan looked at him and asked"how come you live in soho"
"dunno just do i have always like it's arty-feel so thats why i moved there"
"yeah but what about those clown-face's,the hi-hats, dont they ever bother you"
"na coz they kinda get the drift that if thier gonna mess with me,thier messin with the warriors haha those suckers"... and with that they got on the train. as they got in they saw that the ticket warden was coming round for the tickets,he came round to swan and rem and said"tickets please". rembrandt gave him thier two tickets and all the while swan and him were getting stared at by him, swan saw this and explained"you got a problem".. the ticket warden worriedley replied"no,sir,no.. sorry"!! rembrandt laughed as the ticket warden went by and swan laughed too, they talked a little about gang-life and family-life(even though they had bin brothers for a long time,they still didnt know everything about each other) rem asked to swan"so what sort of childhood did you have"
"ahh...well at some degree it was crappy but then again my momma always made sure that i got fed and ya know bathed and that we were safe,i have always lived here, in coney-island so thats how im so used to the place and my father went to vietnam war and he died..ahh i loved my dad he always used to tell me if some of my friends were bossing me around and picking on me...he used to say if he jumped off the brooklyn bridge does it mean you have ha the good,ol,days! so how about you? rembrandt looked at him and said"well my up-bringin was fairly good..i mean it werent the best at times but ya know life goes on, well i was born in porto-rico in spain and my dad was bussiness man-well i say bussiness man i mean a really top lawyer in spain and he had got offered work in america so he went and i was about 6 at the time, we lived in a crummy,little house in the bronx until my dad got his raise and then we moved at a better place in the bronx, with a better house!! my mamma was always loving and my pop well he was the best coz he always had time for me but when i was 10 he died in a car-crash..so yeah my momma fell apart and couldnt cope so for a while-i got sent into care in shitty tremont and then when i was 12 lived with my momma agian and yeah my childhood was ok!!
Rembrandt was looking over swan's shoulder in horror as swan turned around he saw 4 punks were on the train staring right at them!! swan looked and signed as he said to rem"oh no not this agian", he walked up to them and punched one of them in the face the crowd shrieked in horror then the other one jumped on his back and tried to strangle swan then rembrandt came up to the punk on swans back and got his spray can out and sprayed him in the face with it.. the punk cryed out and swan so it his chance to do a round house kick then punched him doing a five-punch-combo, then that punk was knocked out them all of a sudden he saw a punk with a knife going to stab rembrandt so he dived on that punk and grabbed the knife and slit his throat then rem and swan punched one of the windows in and tossed the two remaining punks out,swan and rem went into the back cabin so that hopefully no-one cud get them and to make sure he found a crowbar on the way to the subway elierer and jammed that in the door!! rem said"pheww that was a close one you saved my life..ah jesus christ your bleeding, man" swan looked at his arm and saw that he had a deep cut on his arm(the punk with the knife must of stabbed at him while he was diving at him)
"ahh i'll be fine dont worry, oh i sure hope know one reports us anyways we'll probally be gone by the time they get to the security coz they right up there about 20 cabins away ha the stupid pigs, anyways lets go"
"go where swan we're gonna have to wait until the train stops"
"not nesserceraly, look", he was pointing at a ladder on the outside of the train, rem looked worried and explained"im scarried of heights.. i think"
"just come-on live a little"!! they walked out onto the ladders on the train being careful all the same time and then they climbed on the top of the train and then swan said"ok i know exactly where we are we are near soho so when we come round the corner there is gonna be big feild near the city and we are gonna jump when i say jump...trust me on this ive done it thousand times"..swan looked at him panicky but trustly at the same time, rem so that they were coming through the tracks near the feild" swan focused and shouted"jump right NOWWWW AAHHH" and they landed safely on the feild they stared at each other and rembrandt just belted out saying"im alive..im alive wohoo" and they started laughing then they talked as the were walking near the town of soho!!
When they got there they went to 53rd street where there was a block of apartment's, rem said"this is it" and they went into a door then up 5 flights of stairs and then they went to rembrandts apartment.
ok guys this is the end of part two but i will be doing another part-part 3 coz im going be ending this in chapter 17 so i need to be able to write as much as i can..and yeas chapter17 will be long,really long or if not i might leave it until chapter 18 but we'll see and i hope you've enjoyed this part of chapter 16, and adios boppers!!
Re: the warriors-a love story chapter 16
That was awesome!!!! "Mess with me your messin with the Warriors"
Once again great !
Re: the warriors-a love story chapter 16
Interesting.. well, I gotta say I quite liked that chapter. Was nice to see a bit more background information on both Swan and Rem, and also cool to see them in action against the Punks again.
All I gotta say is that I hope your last few chapters are as good as the rest of the story, as this fan-fic deserves a good ending. I thoroughly look forward to where the story develops from here, and as usual, good work, keep it up.
All I gotta say is that I hope your last few chapters are as good as the rest of the story, as this fan-fic deserves a good ending. I thoroughly look forward to where the story develops from here, and as usual, good work, keep it up.
Re: the warriors-a love story chapter 16
good work lady warrior im gonna miss it when it stops being written
i have a reason, so there fore i am not a rebel without a cause
Re: the warriors-a love story chapter 16
wargod wrote:DUDE YOU SIG IS WAYYYYYYYY TO BIG YOU CAN GET A BAN FOR THAT I THINKRocko wrote: two words. Out Standing
Why am I out standing you ask? Because it was raining and I didn't want anyone to see my tears because your story was so good.
That was a lame joke on my half, but great story![]()
Aw man I know, I need a banner for it, I dont know how to do it tho... but i don't want a ban so im gonna take it off. Thanks for the warning man
Re: the warriors-a love story chapter 16
heh, you've amazed me yet again lady warrior 
& someday, you'll see a fan-fiction from me. just you wait
& someday, you'll see a fan-fiction from me. just you wait
i love you Freddy :D
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Re: the warriors-a love story chapter 16
ooh great action.. i like the sudden right turn in the story, its exciting

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Re: the warriors-a love story chapter 16
aww you guys are so supportiva and ive decided to end this on chapter 18 so will have enough info and to make sure that my story has the perfect ending for my fellow warriors, and tommorow i will write part 3 of chapter 16 then on thursday i will write chapter 17(it will be fairly long) and then chapter 18(the final chapter) will be done on friday-saturday becos i might want a rest my hands on friday so thats why its either friday or saturday when the last chapter will be written, oh and once agian thank you for your support and your ideas and without your help\ideas i would never of made it the way it is(so its not just me puttin in my ideas..its you too) and i love you guys for thatxxx
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ooh its over soon... im excited.
turning those last few pages of the book
turning those last few pages of the book
