Norton Avenue Saints
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July 17, 1974 Saturday afternoon….
Henry and Frank were standing in the shopping mall that just became part of their turf. They were in plane clothes so as not to cause trouble. . Henry was wearing a plain white t-shirt and blue jeans. Frank was wearing a black muscle shirt and black shorts. They kept walking through the mall. They walked through the mall eating corndogs. They saw three boys there age run by in brown vests with little axes on the back. Two mall security were chasing after them. The two boys stepped to the side and let the security run by. It felt good not to be harassed for once.
Henry-Tomahawks. Malcom has talked about them from time to time. They are a small clique. Own about three streets of turf. They sometimes try to run raids on the Smokers.
Frank-I don’t like them. We should wreck them.
Henry-In good time. They own this mall as part of there turf. And two streets over. That’s it. I want them to be next but I’m not sure who is to the north of us.
Frank-Well we should go meet those three outside. Show him who’s boss around here.
Henry-Not today. We are just here as scout.
Frank-Why cant we have Mark or Tommy do this?
Henry-I wanted to see for myself. I wanted to see if any patrols were around here.
Frank-Henry, we’ve been to this mall a million times already.
Henry-Yeah. But we were never looking for other gangs. We were always minding our own business.
Frank-Well come on then. Lets go check out some tunes or something.
Henry-Fine but keep your eyes open.
The two boys kept walking through the mall. They saw a small number of boys in brown vests over by the candy store. They kept walking and saw more in the food court. They headed into the food court and ordered two hotdogs. They sat down near a couple of the rival gang members and listened.
Tomahawk 1-So you guys all know about our neighbors to the east right?
Gang-Yeah
Tomahawk 1-Well have you heard anything about them really?
Tomahawk 2-I heard they took out the Riders and that’s all I know about them man.
Tomahawk 1-Well we should do something about them.
Tomahawk 2-Yeah but what about the Smokers?
Tomahawk 1-You think that group of lame boys are going to bother us? Don’t worry you can consider them taken care of. We’re going to take them out and after that the Saints.
Tomahawk 2-How are we going to do that?
Tomahawk 1-Easy we’re just going to…..
The rest of the conversation was drowned out as three giggling girls heading up to Frank and Henry. They were all there age.
Henry-Haha. Hey Frank. Look who’s coming. Sherry, Maggy and Helen
Frank-Oh no man. Get me out of here.
Henry-Too late now man.
Frank wasn’t afraid of anything, he didn’t show fear and was always confident. He seemed like he could do anything. His only weakness in life was talking to girls. He was never nervous, but as soon as he saw the three girls walking up he became fidgety. The three girls spotted the two boys and headed over.
Helen-Wow guys. I haven’t seen you for a while. What happened.
Henry-We’ve been busy.
Helen-Well you stopped showing up to school. We were worried.
Henry-Yeah sure thing. You missed being annoying huh.
Helen-Don’t be mean Henry.
Henry- Whatever.
The other two girls had turned there attention to Frank.
Maggy-So I heard your in a gang now huh?
Frank-Ummmm yeah. Yeah I am.
Sherry-So that’s how you became so tough looking.
Frank-Hahaha. Yeah I guess so.
Maggy-Hey you know what. You guys should come by my place some time.
Frank-Ummm haha. Maybe…you know I got.
Sherry-Good come by tomorrow. Here’s our address.
Frank-Thanks?
Maggy-And bring some friends too.
Helen- I heard about that big rumble a while back were you involved with that?
Henry-Yeah kind of.
Helen-Don’t mess with me Henry. I know you. That was your gang wasn’t it? Henry…I’m worried about you. Before let out for the summer you were rarely showing up. And when you did you had cuts and bruises. What is happening to you?
Henry-I don’t want to talk about it right now.
Helen-Fine when you and Frank come by I want to talk to you then.
Henry-Fine.
The three girls got up and left. Henry and Frank tried to listen to the rest of the Tomahawks conversation but it had changed to what had happened at a past party. The two boys became bored soon and decided to leave the mall. As they walked out they saw about ten Tomahawks standing around in front smoking. Frank gave them a hard look as they walked by. The ten boys stared back at them. Frank laughed and kept walking.
They came up to a boy sitting in a car. He didn’t come in the mall because he was in colors. His name was Toby, he was a tall and lanky black boy with a fro. He was all right in a fight but they liked him because he was a good source of wheels. A beat up Cadillac. He had bought it with his own money. It had taken him forever but he knew someone who would sell it to him for a grand. He had six hundred and his parents paid the rest. Before they died in a fire. He then came to the gang because he had know where else to go. Frank complained about him being to skinny but Henry knew the wheels would come in handy.
Henry-Thanks for keeping the car warm. So what’s going on?
Toby-Well I saw that gang over there starting to gather so I drove away quickly to see if I could find any reinforcements quickly just in case and found Bill and Carter and Mark patrolling. They found Tommy and Burt a little while ago because Burt was looking for places to tag. They are coming right now. The Tomahawks have been looking at my car and more and more of them kept coming.
Henry-Well we could of made a quick get away. You didn’t have to go look for more people.
Toby-Sorry Henry I wasn’t thinking. They kept looking at my car and I got scared.
Henry-From now on just keep your head in situations.
Frank-Here come these punks.
Sure enough the ten Tomahawks started to approach them. They pulled out knives and chains which they carried because they were easily concealable. Toby grabbed Henry’s and Frank’s vests out of the car and threw them to the boys. They turned and saw Bill, Carter, Tommy, Mark and Burt coming around through the parking lot. They came to them and Toby popped the trunk. Inside were various weapons. Bats, Chains, Bottles, a tire iron and a crowbar. Henry turned and faced the approaching Tomahawks.
Tomahawk-So what do you think your doing on our turf chump.
Frank-Who said this was yours wimp.
As the Tomahawks started to charge they heard sirens. Henry looked around and realized that they were surrounded by security. There didn’t seem anyway to escape.
Henry and Frank were standing in the shopping mall that just became part of their turf. They were in plane clothes so as not to cause trouble. . Henry was wearing a plain white t-shirt and blue jeans. Frank was wearing a black muscle shirt and black shorts. They kept walking through the mall. They walked through the mall eating corndogs. They saw three boys there age run by in brown vests with little axes on the back. Two mall security were chasing after them. The two boys stepped to the side and let the security run by. It felt good not to be harassed for once.
Henry-Tomahawks. Malcom has talked about them from time to time. They are a small clique. Own about three streets of turf. They sometimes try to run raids on the Smokers.
Frank-I don’t like them. We should wreck them.
Henry-In good time. They own this mall as part of there turf. And two streets over. That’s it. I want them to be next but I’m not sure who is to the north of us.
Frank-Well we should go meet those three outside. Show him who’s boss around here.
Henry-Not today. We are just here as scout.
Frank-Why cant we have Mark or Tommy do this?
Henry-I wanted to see for myself. I wanted to see if any patrols were around here.
Frank-Henry, we’ve been to this mall a million times already.
Henry-Yeah. But we were never looking for other gangs. We were always minding our own business.
Frank-Well come on then. Lets go check out some tunes or something.
Henry-Fine but keep your eyes open.
The two boys kept walking through the mall. They saw a small number of boys in brown vests over by the candy store. They kept walking and saw more in the food court. They headed into the food court and ordered two hotdogs. They sat down near a couple of the rival gang members and listened.
Tomahawk 1-So you guys all know about our neighbors to the east right?
Gang-Yeah
Tomahawk 1-Well have you heard anything about them really?
Tomahawk 2-I heard they took out the Riders and that’s all I know about them man.
Tomahawk 1-Well we should do something about them.
Tomahawk 2-Yeah but what about the Smokers?
Tomahawk 1-You think that group of lame boys are going to bother us? Don’t worry you can consider them taken care of. We’re going to take them out and after that the Saints.
Tomahawk 2-How are we going to do that?
Tomahawk 1-Easy we’re just going to…..
The rest of the conversation was drowned out as three giggling girls heading up to Frank and Henry. They were all there age.
Henry-Haha. Hey Frank. Look who’s coming. Sherry, Maggy and Helen
Frank-Oh no man. Get me out of here.
Henry-Too late now man.
Frank wasn’t afraid of anything, he didn’t show fear and was always confident. He seemed like he could do anything. His only weakness in life was talking to girls. He was never nervous, but as soon as he saw the three girls walking up he became fidgety. The three girls spotted the two boys and headed over.
Helen-Wow guys. I haven’t seen you for a while. What happened.
Henry-We’ve been busy.
Helen-Well you stopped showing up to school. We were worried.
Henry-Yeah sure thing. You missed being annoying huh.
Helen-Don’t be mean Henry.
Henry- Whatever.
The other two girls had turned there attention to Frank.
Maggy-So I heard your in a gang now huh?
Frank-Ummmm yeah. Yeah I am.
Sherry-So that’s how you became so tough looking.
Frank-Hahaha. Yeah I guess so.
Maggy-Hey you know what. You guys should come by my place some time.
Frank-Ummm haha. Maybe…you know I got.
Sherry-Good come by tomorrow. Here’s our address.
Frank-Thanks?
Maggy-And bring some friends too.
Helen- I heard about that big rumble a while back were you involved with that?
Henry-Yeah kind of.
Helen-Don’t mess with me Henry. I know you. That was your gang wasn’t it? Henry…I’m worried about you. Before let out for the summer you were rarely showing up. And when you did you had cuts and bruises. What is happening to you?
Henry-I don’t want to talk about it right now.
Helen-Fine when you and Frank come by I want to talk to you then.
Henry-Fine.
The three girls got up and left. Henry and Frank tried to listen to the rest of the Tomahawks conversation but it had changed to what had happened at a past party. The two boys became bored soon and decided to leave the mall. As they walked out they saw about ten Tomahawks standing around in front smoking. Frank gave them a hard look as they walked by. The ten boys stared back at them. Frank laughed and kept walking.
They came up to a boy sitting in a car. He didn’t come in the mall because he was in colors. His name was Toby, he was a tall and lanky black boy with a fro. He was all right in a fight but they liked him because he was a good source of wheels. A beat up Cadillac. He had bought it with his own money. It had taken him forever but he knew someone who would sell it to him for a grand. He had six hundred and his parents paid the rest. Before they died in a fire. He then came to the gang because he had know where else to go. Frank complained about him being to skinny but Henry knew the wheels would come in handy.
Henry-Thanks for keeping the car warm. So what’s going on?
Toby-Well I saw that gang over there starting to gather so I drove away quickly to see if I could find any reinforcements quickly just in case and found Bill and Carter and Mark patrolling. They found Tommy and Burt a little while ago because Burt was looking for places to tag. They are coming right now. The Tomahawks have been looking at my car and more and more of them kept coming.
Henry-Well we could of made a quick get away. You didn’t have to go look for more people.
Toby-Sorry Henry I wasn’t thinking. They kept looking at my car and I got scared.
Henry-From now on just keep your head in situations.
Frank-Here come these punks.
Sure enough the ten Tomahawks started to approach them. They pulled out knives and chains which they carried because they were easily concealable. Toby grabbed Henry’s and Frank’s vests out of the car and threw them to the boys. They turned and saw Bill, Carter, Tommy, Mark and Burt coming around through the parking lot. They came to them and Toby popped the trunk. Inside were various weapons. Bats, Chains, Bottles, a tire iron and a crowbar. Henry turned and faced the approaching Tomahawks.
Tomahawk-So what do you think your doing on our turf chump.
Frank-Who said this was yours wimp.
As the Tomahawks started to charge they heard sirens. Henry looked around and realized that they were surrounded by security. There didn’t seem anyway to escape.
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Re: Norton Avenue Saints
my night has been pretty horrible. logging in and finding a new entry made it better. i like how you're continuing the story, its going good i really like it. keep it uppp
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I decided to change how the dialogue I write will be done. It will be more like a story and not like a script kind of.
It wasn’t actually real cops. They were mall security, although there was enough to pose a real threat. About twenty of them total. They had to of been tipped off because it was almost the entire security force surrounding them. The Tomahawks were also surrounded but immediately they charged the security. It was a slaughter the Tomahawks weren’t good fighters and were disorganized.
“Run and get yourself into the carâ€
It wasn’t actually real cops. They were mall security, although there was enough to pose a real threat. About twenty of them total. They had to of been tipped off because it was almost the entire security force surrounding them. The Tomahawks were also surrounded but immediately they charged the security. It was a slaughter the Tomahawks weren’t good fighters and were disorganized.
“Run and get yourself into the carâ€
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Re: Norton Avenue Saints
Awesome chapter! I'm liking the new writing style. I find it easier to read, not sure about everyone else though . Can't wait for the next one!
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yeah the new writing style is nice. im enjoying this story. lookin forward for the the next entry too
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I liked the story a lot man! your fan fic is really impressive. I'll be looking around the site for more of your storys. I hope you will continue too write them.
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Am loving this story! It's so exciting! I love Mark, he's my favourite, I hope he's ok!
Much prefer the story dialogue, brilliant, man. Brilliant.
Much prefer the story dialogue, brilliant, man. Brilliant.
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thx for all the feed back guys. Dont worry i'll make another chapter soon. if none of you have guessed this yet i am going to lead up until the meeting. After they get back home its over. But there still is a couple years between that so dont worry. I'm not even halfway done with this yet
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I just want to thank you for bringing a sense of reality to this story. I like the fact that although it has action it brings the feeling that gangs are not all fun and games. Especially when that old man spoke about how it can ruin your life. So as long as you bring a sense of realism, it all good.
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suspect...
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dude ur stories are freakin awsome your fights are pretty detailed and quite realistic
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I’m happy this is still here. Rereading my writing during the pandemic brought me some much needed nostalgia.