How I joined the punks
How I joined the punks
Coming soon I got to write the story first
Re: How I joined the punks
well come on man i wana read it
"Where going to the next station,right threw these lame fucks territory!" "Now let's move."
Re: How I joined the punks
I gonna get it started anybody got any questions or comments before I post my story?
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warlord jp
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Re: How I joined the punks
Well copperhead we cant comment on how to write your story man, that will take all the fun of it. The intrest of reading fan fiction from members is to check out their own ideas.. just give it a shot, i know it will be good!Copperhead wrote: I gonna get it started anybody got any questions or comments before I post my story?
btw in english class i was brousing in the dictionary, and found your username. Very cool and unique..
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thanks. I used it cuz I like snakes.
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Re: How I joined the punks
Bowery 11:34pm january 1979
I went down to bowery.I saw two guys arguing in overalls arguing."Man, pac-man will kill mario"one of them said.Then one of them caught my attention."What you doin here?"He said in angry voice."I want to become part of your set if thats fine with you and your leader"I said nervously."Well lets go take vance a visit shall we"he said hitting me in the shoulder.I followed them trembling and terrifyed."Hey vance we got a sucka that wants to be apart of us"the punk said laughing.Vance looked at me and said"You think you got guts comin down to bowery and ask to be part of us?"I looked at him and said "yeah you got a probelm with it.""Dont be a smart ass " vance said."Well I want you to down to riverside and piss off the baseball furies and escape their turf alive and while your at it grab one of their baseball uniforms."You want me to do that that a suicide mission"I said in anger."Too bad your going to do it anyway"he said."Tommy and mickey go with him and help him"vance."He is right it is a suicide mission"tommy said.We went and took a subway train it took about a hour to get there."C,mon lets head into the park and get this shit over with"mickey said.We saw the furies in the park beating the hell out of some savage huns."Damn lets march right through these fuckers"Tommy said.There was five furies in the park.One of the furies was choking tommy so came and hit a empty bottle on his head.Then we fought the furies.One of the furies swung me into the fence.I quickly swung him in the fence and knee him in the groin and punch him in the mouth."C,mon lets get out of here"tommy yelled.I anxiously took one of the furies uniforms.One of the furies tried to get back up but I kicked him in the face and ran."That was pretty easy I "Said walking out the park."Holy shit!!"mickey yelled.There was about twenty furies chasing us.We ran until tommy and mickey passed me up."Wait for me!"I said shouting.We took a turn into a alley we jumped the fences but I still got left behind.When I climbed the fence one of the furies grabbed my leg pulling me down.All of a sudden one of the furies hit me in the nose and I fell on the other side of the fence I quickly recovered my fall and caught up to mickey and tommy.
"They just dont give up do they?"mickey said.He tripped over a big piece of concrete the was on the ground."Go!!!"Mickey said.The furies were coming up fast.Tommy went back"C,mon grab my hand".Mickey refused.I ran and didn't stop.Tommy then caught up to me"Mickey got wasted!!"he said.That made me want to run faster.I looked back and saw the beat mickey.We made it to the subway luckily we got there without getting wasted.We reached the subway platform there we saw vance waiting for us."Well how'd you do?and where's mickey?"I looked down at the furies uniform and handed it to vance.Tommy looked at vance"Mickey got wasted by the furies".Vance looked at me and said "whats your name and your favorite color?"I said"My name is charles and my favorite color is orange."He handed me overalls with orange and white striped shirt and orange converse.I tried it on"Thanks war chief "I said.Jacker from the punks told vance that they should ask the riffs for retribution.Vance said that they will take care of that later."Lets go down to the pub in memory of mickey"he said happy.I then smiled with my orange colored braces in my mouth and walked with them down to the pub.
Will the punks call out for retribution or will the furies just get away with murder stay tuned.
TO BE CONTINUED......??
I went down to bowery.I saw two guys arguing in overalls arguing."Man, pac-man will kill mario"one of them said.Then one of them caught my attention."What you doin here?"He said in angry voice."I want to become part of your set if thats fine with you and your leader"I said nervously."Well lets go take vance a visit shall we"he said hitting me in the shoulder.I followed them trembling and terrifyed."Hey vance we got a sucka that wants to be apart of us"the punk said laughing.Vance looked at me and said"You think you got guts comin down to bowery and ask to be part of us?"I looked at him and said "yeah you got a probelm with it.""Dont be a smart ass " vance said."Well I want you to down to riverside and piss off the baseball furies and escape their turf alive and while your at it grab one of their baseball uniforms."You want me to do that that a suicide mission"I said in anger."Too bad your going to do it anyway"he said."Tommy and mickey go with him and help him"vance."He is right it is a suicide mission"tommy said.We went and took a subway train it took about a hour to get there."C,mon lets head into the park and get this shit over with"mickey said.We saw the furies in the park beating the hell out of some savage huns."Damn lets march right through these fuckers"Tommy said.There was five furies in the park.One of the furies was choking tommy so came and hit a empty bottle on his head.Then we fought the furies.One of the furies swung me into the fence.I quickly swung him in the fence and knee him in the groin and punch him in the mouth."C,mon lets get out of here"tommy yelled.I anxiously took one of the furies uniforms.One of the furies tried to get back up but I kicked him in the face and ran."That was pretty easy I "Said walking out the park."Holy shit!!"mickey yelled.There was about twenty furies chasing us.We ran until tommy and mickey passed me up."Wait for me!"I said shouting.We took a turn into a alley we jumped the fences but I still got left behind.When I climbed the fence one of the furies grabbed my leg pulling me down.All of a sudden one of the furies hit me in the nose and I fell on the other side of the fence I quickly recovered my fall and caught up to mickey and tommy.
"They just dont give up do they?"mickey said.He tripped over a big piece of concrete the was on the ground."Go!!!"Mickey said.The furies were coming up fast.Tommy went back"C,mon grab my hand".Mickey refused.I ran and didn't stop.Tommy then caught up to me"Mickey got wasted!!"he said.That made me want to run faster.I looked back and saw the beat mickey.We made it to the subway luckily we got there without getting wasted.We reached the subway platform there we saw vance waiting for us."Well how'd you do?and where's mickey?"I looked down at the furies uniform and handed it to vance.Tommy looked at vance"Mickey got wasted by the furies".Vance looked at me and said "whats your name and your favorite color?"I said"My name is charles and my favorite color is orange."He handed me overalls with orange and white striped shirt and orange converse.I tried it on"Thanks war chief "I said.Jacker from the punks told vance that they should ask the riffs for retribution.Vance said that they will take care of that later."Lets go down to the pub in memory of mickey"he said happy.I then smiled with my orange colored braces in my mouth and walked with them down to the pub.
Will the punks call out for retribution or will the furies just get away with murder stay tuned.
TO BE CONTINUED......??
Re: How I joined the punks
Any comments?Then post I would luv your feedback.
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StickWarrior
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Re: How I joined the punks
I realy like your story but, I had a hard time reading it. My comment would be, to indent every time someone talks. But other than that keep it up!
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Re: How I joined the punks
Anyone else going to read this?? 
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Warriorfan54321
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Re: How I joined the punks
i liked it was hard to understand who was speaking then so i agree with stick warrior on indenting but other then that good.
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