thought i'd give it a try...

[SharpEdges]

This is excellent, one of the best i have read so far...as i'm new to the site i havn't been able to read all that's on offer, but of the ones i've read this is the most prefessionally done...it's the attention to detail, and showing the personality of the characters...i've noticed a serious lack of attention to the way they all spoke in the previous ones i have read, i'm really enjoying this, looking forward to seeing how this pans out...

[dollFACE]

wow... i really need to update this    will do.