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Chapter 1

The day was always suspected as a safe time of day for the citizens of New York, the sun was shining, the streets were busy, and all seemed safe in the big apple. Unless, you were in the bank, a heist was taking place and the three robbers pulling the heist were all protecting their faces....with robes. Two of them went upstairs while one kept downstairs and teased the guard they had tied up, the only downside to the man in the robe was that they hadn't gagged him so he had to put up with the guards constand screaming, promises and threats.
Suddenly a school bus busted through the window green and rusty.
  "I found it in the old Turnbull place thought I'd get it to New York before we got here" Said the man exiting in the golden robe
2ok the other two are upstairs...take care of them they are not to be trusted." Said the man in the robe as he entered the bus waiting for what was to be stolen to be put in the school bus.
The man in the golden robe headed up the stairs and entered the ROM with the safe, two guards now dead and the other two men in robes now stuffing bags with money
"Nice one we gonna share this with the boss or what?" Asked the man in the golden robe
"No way the boss hired us to steal the money, he didn't say anything about bringing it to him." Said one of the men stuffing the bags.
"Well that's a shame because...I am the boss" whispered the man as he leaned forward so both men could hear him.
They both slowly dropped their bags and started shaking uncontrollably this was the man they had heard so much stories about, the man who controlled it all and they had just made a mistake in front of him.
He pulled a gun out quickly making sure neither man turned around he then pointed it at one of the men as he removed the hood from his robe.
"THOUH SHALT NOT KILL!" Shouted the man in gold as a loud bang echoed through the bank. The other man ran off as soon as the bullet was shot He ran down the stairs and collided with the bus door. The man in gold slowly heading down the steps with bags of money in his hand.
"WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS....WHAT DO YOU BELIEVE IN!" Shouted the man while shaking uncontrollably, trembling with fear.
"I believe...what doesn't kill you makes you....stranger" The man in gold simply said as he shot his gun again, the body of the man he shot now bleeding profusely. The man left a simple cross on the body and got in the school bus, but this cross was no ordinary cross this cross was of the gang named....The Desciples

I like the mystery of this first chapter. Yet, the the spelling and grammar mistakes take away from could be a really good fic. So, just go over your writing, or write in in Microsoft Word, or Word Perfect( any word processor really) and spell check it. It will solve most of your problems. Other then that good foundation for a promising story.

yeah I keep forgetting to prrofread my work it's a bad habbit when writing I dont check for mistakes when I should but yeah I'll start doing it

The Hangout


The bus cruised along the streets, to the untrained eye it just seemed like an old school bus heading back to the school it was owned by, when really it was being driven by a gang leader and his second in command , heading back to their hangout after pulling off a bank heist.
The bus slowly turned right at a dead end sign and headed through automated metal gates, sliding open to let them go in and closing to make sure it was only them who got in.
The leader exited the bus with his second in command and both carried as many bags of money they could inside, making more than one trip to the bus, after all the money was loaded off the bus and into their storage room, they closed the doors of the bus and drove it into a garage, now heading their way inside their hangout.
They were immediately greeted with questions from many of the gang members as soon as they entered.
"How did it go?" Asked  Wes one of the scouts of the group.
"It was successful...I had to kill the two men in the end, but it went well." Answered Christopher the leader of the group. Christopher removed his hood of his robe to reveal a scarred face which the rest of the gang had gotten used to over the years.
"Any word on the radio" asked Grigori the second in command
"I don't know have turned it on." Answered Wes seeming unknown as to why Grigori was asking
"Well turn it on then!" Replied Grigori seeming angry at the fact nobody had listened to the radio, they always listened to the radio after all, there was news of something big going down for the past few weeks, really big.
Wes turned on the radio and the voice of the local DJ echoed through the room as the radio came on.
"Alright now...today's big news, it seems the boys in blue are having trouble with a New York gang, all that was left at the crime scene was a Holy cross...you boppers know what that means, The Desciples are back on the streets after their last run in with their two rival gangs, The Judas Bunch and The Minions, after a long hiatus from the city streets it's seems this is their triumphant return....and now for the biggest news of them all, the magic man has called for something great, and when the magic man speaks The rest will follow...we have no news as to what IT is right now but I'm sure you'll find out anyway...Adios."
"See now that's what I'm talking about, they know we're back now all of them, even The Judas Bunch AND The Minions, they thought we were going to be down and out for good, boy were they wrong...and now the leader of the best gang in the city is calling for something big, well if we wanna go there we're gonna need to do our best to get on The Riff's network." Stated Christophe,r seeming very excited.
"And how are we going to do that?" Asked Grigori
"....Like we always do......fight for it." Replied Christopher, slowly walking into a corner and looking out the window into the empty streets, now that both rival gangs of The Desciples knew they were back, something big was going to go down, big enough to get them on The Riffs' network


What is the past The Desciples have had with The Judas Bunch and The Minions?
WIll The Judas Bunch and The Minions fight aginst The Desciples?
To Be Continued....

Warriorfan54321 wrote: What is the past The Desciples have had with The Judas Bunch and The Minions?
WIll The Judas Bunch and The Minions fight aginst The Desciples?
To Be Continued....

First of all you're doing a Great Job Warriorfan54321... then, about what I quoted, you know what? Those Question remind me of The Batman 60s Series, at the end of every episode, there were that kinda Questions!!!

Yeah, Good Shot Man!!! 8)