the wariors-a love story chapter4

[the lady warrior]

sorry guys that i took so long to write agian,i was just having a kinda long break thanx well heres the next chapter.enjoy!!

                                        chapter4
                                        1:00pm

It was now 5weeks since mercy had been dead including the funeral,vermin,snow,ajax were playing cards and smoking,while th other warriors were just trianing down at the gym area.swan still felt sad but after a short amount of time he realised she wasnt coming back,he was watching starsky and hutch and he had grew a rough looking lot of stubble. snow said"why dont you get a shave cos it wud make you feel cleaner bro" swan ignored that comment and said"guys im goin to get some chicken from the butchers" they all replied"ok man", he walked down the street past the board-walk where mercy had died and everywhere he saw couples,baby's,kissing and of course mercy came into his mind.he was now right outside the butchers and got his chicken,just has he was coming out the butchers he saw THE DISCO GIRL and he walked up to her and said"hey how you doin" he was sad to see that she didnt reconise him.
"its me swan...the man that rescued you from the fire"
she smiled then laughed and said"oh sorry about that i didnt think it was you cos you've grown a little bit of a beard" swan blushed he replied"yeah i need a shave i geuss,so hows live been lately...erm...erm (he then looked at her tag on her t-shirt it had her name on it) dianna"
"great i've been great and i just want to say thankyou for saving my life swan"
"oh well i guess it was just instinct to help you" she replied"do you wanna go to the black horse bar for a drink its just down the street" swan then said"sure thing well lets go er you dont mind my chicken comes too do you(he holded it up for her to see...she laughed)"
"no of course not",then they walked happily down the street to the black horse!

They had already had 3 drinks of cocktails when they decided to dance,they danced to dancing queen and as they were dancing and were gazing into each others eyes.dianna said"lets go to my place" swan cudnt resist her charms so he just said"yes" when they got back to her house,she opened the door then she said"sit down" swan went to sit down....you have to find out next what happens in the next part of chapter4 thanx boppers adios till next time plz post comments!!! 8)

[Dud]

Hey, just popping in to thank you for the great comment you left in my fan-fic, it is very appreciated, and I'm here to return the comment. 

First off, may I suggest keeping all the chapters in one thread? Just because I have to click back through your other threads to be able to keep up with what's happened so far. =P

I do like what you've done with the story so far though, you've got people's emotions over well, especially in this chapter when you've done how Swan is struggling to come to terms with Mercy's death, with forgetting to shave, etc. - that's good.  8)

Another thing you maybe should do is just proof-read your chapters before you post them, just to make sure you don't make any small mistakes like missing capitals, spelling words wrong and so on.

Overall, I'm liking this story and with a few improvements here and there, it could turn out to be really good. Just don't make the next chapter too rude. 

[wargod]

sorry guys that i took so long to write agian,i was just having a kinda long break thanx well heres the next chapter.enjoy!!

                                        chapter4
                                        1:00pm

It was now 5weeks since mercy had been dead including the funeral,vermin,snow,ajax were playing cards and smoking,while th other warriors were just trianing down at the gym area.swan still felt sad but after a short amount of time he realised she wasnt coming back,he was watching starsky and hutch and he had grew a rough looking lot of stubble. snow said"why dont you get a shave cos it wud make you feel cleaner bro" swan ignored that comment and said"guys im goin to get some chicken from the butchers" they all replied"ok man", he walked down the street past the board-walk where mercy had died and everywhere he saw couples,baby's,kissing and of course mercy came into his mind.he was now right outside the butchers and got his chicken,just has he was coming out the butchers he saw THE DISCO GIRL and he walked up to her and said"hey how you doin" he was sad to see that she didnt reconise him.
"its me swan...the man that rescued you from the fire"
she smiled then laughed and said"oh sorry about that i didnt think it was you cos you've grown a little bit of a beard" swan blushed he replied"yeah i need a shave i geuss,so hows live been lately...erm...erm (he then looked at her tag on her t-shirt it had her name on it) dianna"
"great i've been great and i just want to say thankyou for saving my life swan"
"oh well i guess it was just instinct to help you" she replied"do you wanna go to the black horse bar for a drink its just down the street" swan then said"sure thing well lets go er you dont mind my chicken comes too do you(he holded it up for her to see...she laughed)"
"no of course not",then they walked happily down the street to the black horse!

They had already had 3 drinks of cocktails when they decided to dance,they danced to dancing queen and as they were dancing and were gazing into each others eyes.dianna said"lets go to my place" swan cudnt resist her charms so he just said"yes" when they got back to her house,she opened the door then she said"sit down" swan went to sit down....you have to find out next what happens in the next part of chapter4 thanx boppers adios till next time plz post comments!!! 8)

ANOTHER GREAT PIECE OF WORK HERE LADY WARRIOR

[the lady warrior]

thanx guys for the on-goin support so heres the next part of chapter4!!

                                  the next part of chapter4

Dianna came over to him and started making out with him swan felt guilty about mercy and dragged her off him,she said"whats wrong i thought you wanted this,oh wait a minute...you dont like me" swan tried to explain"no-no its not that its....its personal"
"oh dont tell me you've got another girl pregnant and you forgot to tell me,well fuck-u swan"
"no you dont understand it's not about that its... she interupts-
"no more excuses just take your stupid gang vest and your chicken and get the fuck outta my house" swan didnt argue and went thru the door and said"sorry" before gettin the door slammed on his face. he went back home to his apartment and lay on his bed bed,he started crying saying"what have i done mercy,im sorry mercy for all the shit i but you thru" and he fell asleep! the next day the door-bell rang and swan fell off his bed still half-sleepy then answered the door(it was snow and cochise)

"hey guys what you doin here"
"to get you,to go to the hangout...ya now like what we normally do everyday-bro you even listening to me" cochise said.swan gazed around then said"yeah lets go then"! they then go to the hangout where swan is keep trying to phone dianna but she will not pick up then she does and he tells her why he didnt make out with her the other night but she gets even more mad with him for not tellin him about mercy at first and then he shouts and bawls at her for critazising him when he's just lost his girlfriend then BAM she slams the phone down on him.
"shit i hate this" he then decides to go play cards with snow and they talk about dianna and snow says:
"man thats some bad shit you got yourself into there"
"well you dont know whats its like really do you to be torn between 2 things and dont know which derection to take"
"man you dont know my love life i let you in to a story.well i met this girl called casandra when i was 17 in my high-school and she was the love of my life then i got her pregnant and things started to go topsy-turvy between us but we still loved each other,then i met this other girl dina and she was much hotter than cassandra but she was a whore so then cassandra found out i liked this other girl but didnt dump me then thier both said they'd give me a choice who to go and spend the rest of me live with"-
"so did you choose then"
"no one becos casandra was a bitch and plus i werent ready to be a daddy and dina was a whore and it wud ruin my rep as cruel as it sounds it was true"
"so basically your tellin me to leave her alone wipe her outta my life so my life will supossubly be better"
"exactly"

swan then went off to think about it shud he really do that he thought...he thought until he decided he'd get back in touch with her only if she wanted to first that way they can both let each other go kindly if she didnt want to be with him,simple!!

rite that was the end of chapter4,hope your enjoying it,i'll be writing chapter5 soon thanx boppers for your support like i said earlier adios!!!

[wargod]

GREAT WORK LADY WARRIOR YOUR THE BEST

[Dud]

Thanks a lot for the comment on my story; I'm here to repay it. 

Another nice chapter, lady warrior.

One small thing from me is just remember that names of people always begin with a capital letter. I don't know if your 'Shift' key doesn't work right or something, but just remember that Swan, Dianna, Mercy, etc., should always begin with a capital. 

That's all though, and I am liking where this is going. Keep it up.  8)