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The final part of my first story!!!!

Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2006 6:17 pm
by Ash-Mckean
[They start running into a busted ally full of homeless bums asking for dollars and food]

[One grabs at Cochise]

Cochise: Man get the f**k off me!!
[Vermin laughs]
Swan: Guys shut up, There it is.
[He points to a old school green bus used by the turnballs who are now officially spraying up there tags and getting in the flash

[Inside]
1 turnball:Christ what a sh*t hole [Kicking over a chair]
2 turnball: Man the warriors are gonna be p*ssed
[They see vermin's vest in the light]
Turnball Warchief: S**T! THE WARRIORS, GET EM

[6 Turnballs run in front of them but as that happens new bloods jump from behind them and jump them]
New blood: How you like that huh!
[Cochise flips one of them that ran at him sending him crashing threw an old fence]
Cochise: IDIOT!
[Swan is pushed to a wall as the turnball warchief starts pounding at his ribs, He then throws Swan near a tramp bin which was on fire to keep the tramps warm]
A.C Warchief: Warriors, You finished [Charges at him yelling, Swan moves right and trips him over causing his face to hit the bin on fire and set him alight]

Swan:No, you finished

[Cochise and Vermin and jumping a few A.C'S who came out of the building and smashed in there face's with the fence shards,Cochise keeps hammering his face and watched the blood splash onto his face]
Vermin: Dude chill out for a bit

Ash(New blood): Guys we wasting them!!!

[More Warriors come including Rembrandt]
Rembrandt: Hey Warchief i tagged all there signs [Around Rembrandt was a bottle of whiskey with a handkerchief attached to the end]
Rembrandt: Thought you might of needed it.
Vermin: Give me that! [Grabs it and puts the end onto the bin of fire which lights it]
Swan: VERMIN THROW IT IN THERE
[Vermin runs in there quick as reinforcements start to pour in there including there Warlord]
Vermin: F**k on this you turnball s**ts!!
[Vermin throws it in tehre and jumps over the metal stairs as the place EXPLODED]
Cochise: Man those were some despertate dudes..
Vermin: Hey so was we!
[They all laugh and start to head off but Swan keeps Vermin behind]
Swan: Hey vermin, im leaving the gang and started again.
Vermin: What?!?
Swan: Im making you Warchief
[Vermin shocked and proud]
Vermin: Thanks Warc- I mean Swan
[They head into the Horizon]

The final part of my first story!!!!

Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2006 6:25 pm
by Ash-Mckean
Well if you have read all 3 parts, WADDA YA THINK, and cowboy rules if you on tomoz we can plan and start the story

The final part of my first story!!!!

Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2006 7:19 pm
by cowboy rules
godd story and i will be on tomoro so a'l talk u then

The final part of my first story!!!!

Posted: Thu Jan 05, 2006 2:15 am
by BaseballFury100
wicked story, vermin is finally getting his!!!

btw make ajax come out of jail!!!

The final part of my first story!!!!

Posted: Thu Jan 05, 2006 2:40 am
by ZombiePunk
amazing story!

The final part of my first story!!!!

Posted: Thu Jan 05, 2006 6:09 pm
by Ash-Mckean
Hey thanks alot people, i feel more confidant to write more and thank you for the good remarks and telling me what i can work on.

The final part of my first story!!!!

Posted: Thu Jan 05, 2006 9:45 pm
by Manson-Cryptorchild
That was a great story, very creative!

The final part of my first story!!!!

Posted: Thu Jan 05, 2006 9:49 pm
by Ash-Mckean
Thanks very much for the feedback me and cowboy rules are making a story about a new gang in the city