Swans roots

[CleonWarlord]

May 10th,1969                                A 14 year old walked down the hall of Coney Island High School. The teenager was a loner who barely ever talked to anyone and never ever really had a relationship with a girl,the kids name was Swan. As he continued to walk down the hall,he walked right in front of 3 grade 11's. 'Watch where you're going B!#tch boy" Swan ignored and tried to walk around the bully. The grade 11 stopped Swan and put him against a locker and he wound up a good punch and swung at Swan but Swan ducked and gave the big kid a good solid hit to ribs. The grade 11 dropped to his knees. And the grade 11's friends watched in Ahhh as one of the toughest kids in the school was beaten by a 9th grader. Swan walked away and left the school.

         Swan was walking through East Coney to go see his buddy Cowboy,one of the only persons he talked to. swan walked up to the house and rang the doorbell. A slim and kind of short kid answred the door."Hey Swan...What's going on"? Cowboy said."Nothing,just a little Peed off" said Swan...."What happened"? said Cowboy. "Nothing seroius,Dosent really matter" Said Swan. "I broke some 11th graders spleen today,,,i heard his name was Cobb or something....said Swan."dude..i heard stories about that guy...i even heard he wears face paint. "I dont care..if him and his friends come for me,thier gonna come for me,i'm ready.Said Swan."I got you're back Swan,don't worry man,i might be small but never judge a book by it's cover right"? Said Cowboy. The two laughed."Alright,well i am gonna head back to my place Cowboy,ill see ya later" said Swan"Wait!...man i know where that Cobb guy lives,he lives up in riverside..maybe we can scout and around and see how many boys hes got wacthin his back and maybe we can take him out. Said Cowboy."Dunooo,if we get made up there...we will get wrecked." Said Swan. "true,true..but i know a couple guys that could come with us,they are both in grade 10....but i heard there rollin with some outfit called the Destroyers". Said Cowboy."Hmmmm...are you sure they are trustworthy and wont backstab us'? Asked Swan....."Yeah im sure..one of them is one hell of a comaplainer,,but hes loyal,that's what matters right"? Said Cowboy. "Yeah i guess..alright..well come to my ohuse tonight and we will go see these guys youwere talking about and then we will head up to Riverside". Said Swan."Cool,alright see ya Swan. Said cowboy. Cowboy shuts the door. Swan walked back to his house and got ready to leave with Cowboy later on.

   


    Alright guys,tell me truthfully if it sucked or i should keep writing..or give me a scale of 1 to 10

[ajax1234]

taht was great carry on 9/10

[CleonWarlord]

May 10th  1969 Later that night
     
                  Swan was getting ready to leave with Cowboy. He put on a sweater and he brought a pocket knife just to make sure he didn't get wrecked. He went downstairs and headed out the door. When he got to Cowboys house, Cowboy had a sudden change in attire. "How do i look Swan''? said Cowboy."Hehe, nice stetson hat..suits you i guess" replied Swan. Cowboy laughed. "Alright, let's go get Cleon and Vermin, they said theyd be around The Destroyers hangout". Said Cowboy. "cool,let's go'' said Swan "Errrrr..but what if the Destroyers wanna wreck us"? Said Cowboy "Don't worry,we are not an outfit". Replied Swan. "Ok,alright let's go find them" Said Cowboy. Swan and Cowboy headed to The Destroyers turf.

                 "Alright, i think this is The Destroyers hangout. Said Cowboy. Swan and Cowboy headed up the steps to the door. Cowboy knocked on the door. Footsteps grew louder to the door. The door opened,it was one of the Destroyers."You got business here sucker"? Said the Destroyer."Yeah man,i'm looking for a couple of my friends here.Said Cowboy."Who ya looking for rookie"? Replied the Destroyer."Cleon and Vermin. Said Cowboy."one second" said the destroyer. A well built black teenager came to the door along with his friend."Sup Cowboy,heard ya need some help wastin some sucker from riverside. Said Cleon."Yeah man we do" replied Cowboy. "Hey Vermin" said cowboy"hey man" said Vermin "Whos this young blood" Said Cleon."ohh..i forgot..this my buddy Swan,he's the guy who wrecked that dude Cobb at school earlier today."Sup man" said Cleon. Swan nodded at Cleon."Alright,we best get going" Said Cleon."Yeah right" said Cowboy. Cleon and Vermin walked out the door with Swan and Cowboy. They headed up to the train station and got a ride to Riverside."So what's your'e story Swan" Said Cleon."I grew up in Soho for a bit,then i moved down here". Replied Swan."That's cool man,so u wrecked Cobb"? Said Cleon."Yeah,pretty much" Replied Swan."By the way,you packed"?. said Cleon. Swan reached in his pocket and showed cleon the knife."Good,we are gonna need that,him and his boys will be usin weapons" Said Cleon."Hopefully theres not too many of emm' Said Vermin."Oh well,we just gotta sneak in and hopefully we can just get Cobb wrecked and not have to bop through all his protection". replied Cowboy. the four continued talking. (10 minutes later)"Well here we are guys" Said Cleon."Finally,ughh,that was a long train ride"Said Vermin."alright Cowboy,you know where this big bull lives'? said Cleon"Yep..hehe...belive it or not..he lives in a baseball park on the sitting bench where baseball players sit...haha..he shouldnt be too hard to find" "Yeah but it depends on how many guys hes got watching his back" Said Swan. They all walked down the street and found the park'Here it is,he should be around here" Said Cowboy. Vermin get up on that house and scout around then meet us in the park in about 5" Said Cleon."cowboy,you go scout on the other side and then report back to the park". Said Cleon"Alright Swan,it's just you and me,let's roll" The two walked in the park and looked around for Cobb."He's not around here,let's keep moving" Said Cleon"WAIT". Whispered Swan."There he is" Said Swan."Dude,i don't know how you wrecked his @$$,he is one big dude,last time i seen him,he was a little smaller" . . Said Cleon. Cobb was standing near the bench talking to one of his friends,his friend was holding a baseball bat.. Cobb had a bandage around his stomach. Swan and Cleon ducked in some shadows."Hey guys!' Said Vermin."SHHutup Vermin,Cobbs right there". "holy crap,that guys huge swan,howd you take him"? "I really don't know" replied swan."Did you see any soldiers Vermin"? Said Cleon."Yeah,,he's got 2 guys at the end of the park" Replied Vermin."Wheres Cowboy"? Said Swan."there he is" Said Cleon. Cowboy ran up to the guys"Be quiet cowboy" Said cleon"Cobb is right there."cleon,he hasnt got any soldiers at the other end of the park and he's got a crap load of baseball bats" Said Cowboy."Cowboy,get back there and get 2 or 3 bats,Cobb is hurtin but he is gonna be up to a rumble. Vermin you go with him too" Said Cleon. Cowboy and Vermin headed back to the Baseball Bat rack."Alright Swan,you still got that knife"?"Yeah" Replied Swan."Well get  ready,let's go wreck him" Said Cleon




Alright once again....give me a scale of 1 to 10 and some honest comments about it.

[ajax1234]

again very good please carry on 9/10

[Ramsey]

Hey man.. those are pretty good. Keep going on.

[CleonWarlord]

         Swan and Cleon ran towards Cobb and his soldier. Cleon gave Cobb a roundhousekick and swan speared Cobbs friend. "Come on Big Daddy!!!!" Yelled Cleon" Cleon smoked Cobb right in the jaw. You're a dead man you sucker" Said Cobb. Swan threw numerous punches to Cobbs friend,he was out like a light. "Ahh..ughh..crap,help me Swan"!. Said Cleon. Cobb had Cleon by the throat and and was elbowing Cleon Visciusly. Swan ran to Cobb and tried to stop Cobb from elbowing Cleon,but Cobb just backhanded Swan and Swan fell back. Cleon was now bleeding. Swan got back up and took his knife out and threw it at Cobb's shoulder"Arggg" Screamed Cobb. Cleon."Ahhhh.....thanks Swan" Said Cleon."Anytime" Replied Swan Running foootsteps were aproaching Swan and Cleon."Guys,here comes action!" Said Cowboy. 2 teenagers with facepaint came running after cowboy and Vermin."Here,take it Swan"! Said Vermin. Vermin threw a baseball bat to Swan. "Sit tight Cleon" Said Swan. Vermin tunred around and threw the bat at one of the teenagers knees"AHHHH" Yelled the kid. Cowboy was busy fighting the other one. Swan ran to help Cowboy,but then he felt something brush up behind his back.SMACK! It was Cobb, Swan fell and he was bleeding from the mouth."You're soo dead you dont even know it" Screamed Cobb. Vermin was still busy fighting the kid,but he quickly finished him off with a bat to the face. Cowboy was taken to the ground by the kid,the kid was pounding cowboy. Vermin came running behind the kid and jumped on top of him and elbowed him in the back of the head. And the kid was knocked out. "One second Swan!" said Vermin. Vermin ran to Cobb and jumped on him,but cobb just shook him off. Cowboy was still lying on the ground. Cobb was punching Swan in the face numerously. His knife was by Cleon. Cleon barely had any energy to get up and fight. Cleon picked up the knife and threw it to Swan."Here man..then Cleon fell back down. Swan caught the knife. "You're done you sasquatch!" Screamed Swan. Swan stabbed Cobb right through his cheek to the other side and cobb screamed and then he fell off Swan . Cobb was laying in a puddle of his own blood. Vermin got back up and went to Cowboy."Cmon man,you can make it and grabed cowboys hand and picked him up."Thanks man" Said Cowboy. Swan got up,battered and bruised and went to Cleon. "Thanks man,i owe you" Said Swan. "Dont worry bout it brother" Said Cleon. "Alright guys,the pigs are gonna be on their way,we better haul ass back to Coney" Said Cowboy."Yeah,right" Said Vermin. Cleon got up,holding his side and limped kind of."You can make it man" Said Vermin. "Hehe,we wont be hearing from tht giant for a while" Laughed Cleon"We better head back' Said Swan."Yeah,i am a mess,let's go" Said Cleon. Swan,Vermin,Cowboy and Cleon headed to the train station and headed back to Coney Island.

[Sleeping Dragon]

10/10 on all,brotha!!

[CleonWarlord]

Anybody else like my old fan fic I made a while back?

[GramercyRiff99]

It was a pretty good story. I hate to nitpick, but there is no Coney Island High School. The closest one would be Abraham Lincoln High in Brighton Beach... alright so I do like to nitpick . Still, pretty good overall.

[CleonWarlord]

It was a pretty good story. I hate to nitpick, but there is no Coney Island High School. The closest one would be Abraham Lincoln High in Brighton Beach... alright so I do like to nitpick . Still, pretty good overall.

Lol. . Well I don't know much about Coney Island. Lol, I just wanted to make the story interesting. 

[TheFlamingSwan666]

Continue the story man it's really good writing 10/10 on both!