The Faceless demon By: Storm

[Storm86]

hey guys I started this story and I want some feed back. but it isn't Warrior related so I put it here.


Al K. Hall is a faceless demon. Al for short. he can be as small as a mouse or as big as the Sears tower. He is invisible to the naked eye and lives in a bottle. He seems friendly enough, some mere mortals are even friendly under the influence of Al. Some are not so lucky. they are more inept to Al's true colors, a violent loud menace who lives only to hurt. Misguided youths are under the impression that this demon is their friend, but they are mistaken. He will be with you for a few short hours but gone in the blink of an eye. Al comes in many forms, he can be very weak or very powerful depending on when you catch him. He has no voice and depends on the help of others to claim new victims. but sometimes Al's victims are not only the poor souls he captures.
It was a cold and rainy christmas eve night, Stan Brighton had just finished his 9th whiskey sour and left the bar. This was an exceptionally rough night for Stan. He came home from work to find a note on the door from his wife. She was leaving him and taking the kids. There was no sign of anything wrong in their marriage, she just up and left. Stan was a recovering Alcoholic, but tonight not an AA meeting in the world could stop his urge to return to an old friend, the demon Al.

[MiddleMan07]

Very powerful storm, a great story dealing with the tough topic of addiction relapsing.

Thats some fine writing right there!

[Storm86]

thank you. this is only the beginning. stay tuned boppers , stay tuned

[Cowboy79]

It sounds good big bro! Can't wait to hear more of this story.

[trixter468]

I like it Storm. Its deep. Keep it up.

[Storm86]

thanks guys, I'm kinda stuck now I'll post more as soon as I have it

[Storm86]

I'm still stuck I promise I will get to it as soon as I can.

[trixter468]

We're waiting. ............................ Take your time, but don't forget about this one. I like your style of writing and want more!

[adam88]

Yeah that was some deep stuff.  I think its an interesting issue, that how everyone deals with their own inner demons.  Whether its on drugs, abuse, depression, drug addictions, and just straight up confusion, we all face them.  Its a reality that only we can face and and overcome.  This universe puts obstacles in our path, that tests us.  We are like pieces on a chess board, and we are constantly played with to see what the outcome is.  Theres an ancient word called "Mitote" It means a thousand voices.  Its all the uncontrollable thoughts, and issues we deal with that float in our head.  We are in constant struggle to overcome them, and find our way in this universe, that is so mysterious.