The Turnbulls Revenge-Chapter 3 part 2! i need feedback!!!!!

[cowboy rules]

Alright now boppers. This is my first fan fic i've done on my own (the last one was with ash-mckean about a new gang. check it out!) I hope y'all like this one.

Chapter 1: The Attack
A week after the meeting:
The beach seemed calm to the Warriors as they sat staring out onto the ocean in silence. Swan, Cowboy,Snow,Cochise and Mercy had decided to take a walk down to the beach to get some fresh air and had left the rest of the Warriors at the arcade.
" Do you guys ever wonder why we do what we do?" Cowboy asked his friends
"Yeah. I do." said Snow" But I found the answer. We do it 'cos of loyalty. We made the choice of joining this gang and now we know we owe it to our brothers...to fight with em....to defend em"
"Man,Snow you almost sounded smart there" Cochise said, making the Warriors laugh
"Come on lets get back to the hangout, see what the others are up to" Swan said standing up. Then the rest of his soldiers stood up and walked towards the hangout.

Vermin and Rembrandt were playing Pacman in the arcade with a couple of newbloods when they seen the smoke rising quite near them.
"Hey what the hell is that?" said Vermin pointing towards the smoke
"Holy crap I think thats the hangout!" Rembrandt said
"Come on guys lets go see whats goin on over there." Vermin said running out the arcade toward the Hangout.

Swan and the others had spotted the smoke as well and began runningg to the hangout. They got there at the same time as Vermin and the other Warriors.
"What the fucks goin on here?" Cowboy asked the others
"We dunno! We just got here" Rembrandt told them
The fire was still raging when they arrived and the Warriors stood there helplessly as more newbloods arrived to see the blaze.
"Somebody go get water goddamnit!" Cochise shouted to the others
"Cochise! Calm it. Theres nothin we can do. Its too big. All we can do is wait till it stops and find out who the hell done this to us." Swan said in a cool, calm way
"How the fuck can you say that! We built this place to make it ours!" Cochise said angrily
"COCHISE! SHUTUP! WE ALL WANNA DO SOMETHIN....WERE ALL ANGRY BUT FACE IT THERES NOTHIN WE CAN DO!"Swan shouted back at him this time more angy than ever.

An hour later the fire stopped and the smoke was swept away by the breeze.
"Now lets try and find out who did this."Swan said
"I think i already found out" Rembrandt said pointing to the picture of an angry bull on the wall
"...The AC's" Swan said quitely.
"AAAAAAARRRRRRGGGGGHHHHHH. THOSE BUNCH A BALD BASTARDS! IM GONNA KILL EM ALL!!!"Cochise shouted in rage
"Dont worry.....were gonna get them back" Swan told them "Round up the soldiers! I got a message for them"

End of part 1 stay tuned for part 2 coming soon

[Ash-Mckean]

Mate i think you do great on your own and cant wait for the next part

[cowboy rules]

Chapter 2-part 1: Kickin Some Hairless Ass

The Warriors were in a building in the east of Coney. A building that was formely the hangout of the Destroyers. They were waiting for Swanand listening to a newly purchased radio as the other one was now ashes due to the fire.
"Alright Boppers it seems to be getting pretty heavy out there. Especially for the Warriors. It looks like the AC'S could'nt get the job done after the meeting so they've took revenge on that outfit from Coney by burning down their hangout. Were will things go from here boppers? well i guess we'll have to just wait and see. In other news the van courtland rangers got wasted whil trying to take some moon runner turf-" The DJ's voice was gone after Snow turned the radio off.
"This is crap! Every gang in the citys gonna think were pussys now even though we bopped past pretty much every gang in the city." Snow exclaimed
"There bein smart about it though i'll give em that" Cowboy told them "They know they would get wasted if they came down here for a straight out brawl thats why there tryin to lure us out....make us go to Gunhill to get them. That way they'll be ready for us and they'll have the home turf advantage"
The door then opened and Swan came walking in with Mercy
"Alright. Everybody here?" Swan asked looking at his soldiers. There was almost 150 of them there." Now we all know what happened earlier and were all pissed! But the Turnbulls are a heavy set and remember we aint ever brawled with em before so we dont konw what there like. But that aint gonna stop us. Tommorow were going to Gunhill. But were not all goin. I dont want the same thing happening to this hangout that happened to the last. Now Vermin I want you to stay behind with some of the newbloods to make sure nothin happens"
"But-" Vermin whimpered
"Vermin this aint the time to argue Snow, Cowboy, Rembrandt, Cochise and you newbloods" Swan said pointing to thirty newbloods sitting against a wall " You're comin to Gunhill with me. But the Turnbulls are gonna be expecting a full on attack but we aint gonna do that. We aint gonna fall into their trap. We'll all go to Gunhill at different times and we'll find safe hiding spots and wait till everyones there. Then were gonna take out these assholes by marchin into their hangout. Were all gonn go in different ways and take each and every Turnbull we see out. And while were waiting to go in we'll try to take out as many as their scouts as possible. Now this isnt gonna be easy. Were gonna have to use stealth instead of boppin this time" Swan told his soldiers " For now were gonna wait here and get this place sorted. Tomorrow...we get our revenge!

hope you like the second part! leave feedback

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i dont know how to edit the name of this story on the main fan fic page! can someone please tell me?

[cowboy rules]

Now this is the last part for now but there will be more to come

Chapter2-part 2:

The next day at the hangout there was an electricity in the air that most of the newbloods had never experienced before.They wer getting prepared to go to Gunhill. A group, led by Snow had already left. They decided that they would all storm the AC Hangout at 8 oclock whenit got dark. It was 6 at the moment and another group of warriors, this time led by Cowboy were just leaving.
"Hey Warlord!" Cowboy shouted to Swan"We'll see you when you get there."
"Yeah. Take care of yourself out there. I dont wanna lose any more soldiers." Swan replied as he watched Cowboy leave the hangout.
"Alright. Rembrandt, Cochise, Paul, Jack, Mark and TJ. You guys are with me. Now Rembrandt I want you to hit everything in Gunhill. I want that place dripping red tomorrow." Swan sain
"Yeah no problem Warlord." Rembrandt replied
"OK we leave in 20 minutes. Get ready. Were in for a rough night"

Snow and his soldiers stepped off the train at Gunhill scouting for any AC's. When they were sure they were alone they moved. They ran down the stairs into the street. It was all too familiar to Snow.
"Alright. Were gonna hide over there. Now I need everyone to stay hidden anyone of us get spotted and were done for. So stay in the shadows and do everything I tell you" Snow told them. Then he led his soldiers to a shadowed spot under the bridge and hit behind some dumpsters.
"The others should be arriving soon" Snow told the Warriors

The only thing that could be heard on Cowboy's group's train was the rumble of the carts on the tracks. There was silence for almost the whole trip as the bare minimum was said. Then suddenly, out of nowhere the train stopped and the lighs went out.
"What the hell?" Cowboy said allowed hoping for an answer. The train was empty apart from the Warriors and the drivers had come to tell what had happened
"Uh....theres been a power failure I'm afraid. You're gonna have to get off the train" The driver told them
"Aw shit.....alright lets go" Cowboy said as he got up to leave the train"Were at 96th Street Station....We can walk the rest of the way". The wind was cold when they stepped out of the station. Cowboy had been here only last week and his face still hurt from the blow he took from the Furie. God I hope we dont run into those creeps again, he thought as he led his group of newbloods up the street. There was a sign for Gunhill. They were 1 mile away. They were gonna make it afterall. Or so they thought.......

End of part 2. Hope you enjoyed it

[prozium]

Good stuff, very exciting too I'm eagerly awaiting the rest.

[cowboy rules]

OK Boppers heres part 3 and when you read this could someone PLEASE leave me a reply on how to edit the title on the fan fic page. its a pretty stupid question but i am a dumbass when it comes to computers. thanks!

Part 3: Meanwhile back at ythe hangout Swan and his warparty were getting ready to leave
"Everyone ready?" Swan asked
"Yeah" His soldiers replied and with that said they made their way to Stillwell Station.

Cowboy and his party were moving quickly through the Bronx on their wa to Gunhill.
"Alright we should.nt be too long now. Lets keep moving." He told his troops. The war party continues up a hill and stopped suddenly as they all saw what was on the other side of the hill. There was a small war going on between the Punks and the Furies. There was blood and bodys everywhere, some Punks and some Furies. But by the looks of things the Punks were getting the better of the fight. The Warriors eld back watching the carnage before them for 5 long minutes before the Punks put down the last Furie.
"You freaky fucks, make that the last time you ever run into the Punks unlessyou want your asses wasted. You got that?" said the Punk Leader
"Alright there off guard and tired" Cowboy told his party " Now lets get em before they realise were here. Their numbers have dropped so it should'nt be a hard bop but dont have any mercy. These guys are heavy. When I say we'll attack........NOW!" Cowboy shouted. All the Warriors charged at the worn out Punks and the plan went exactly as they wanted. The Punks were off guard and off balance and the Warriors had a huge advantage
"What the f-" The Punk leader tried to shout but was cut off as Cowboy landed a heavy punch on his nose sending blood shooting in all directions. The Punk leader fell to the ground and never got back up. The newbloods went to work on the rest of the confused Punks and before they even knew what had hit them The Punks were lying on their backs with blood streaming from ther faces.
"Alright lets go." Cowboy told his soldiers, stepping over the battered and bruised bodys that were on the ground. The place looked like a car wreck.

Snow and his war party had been hiding for half an hour in the shadows and some of the newbloods were getting aggrivated.
"Come on man this is bull crap. There aint nobody here" One of the Newbloods moaned
"Hmph.....The last time I heard someone saying that we nearly got run over by a bus.....The Turnbulls Bus. So shut the hell up and wait until seven thirty then we'll move" Snow said to the compplaining newbloods. Just then lights appeared at the end of the tunnel.
"Eveyrbody get in!" Snow hushed as the greenbus came down the street. The Warriors watched the bus, some in fear some in fascination, but all in anxiety to see what would turn out. The Bus stopped about 100 yards from were the Warriors were hiding and 2 turnbulls got off. They were on patrol.
"Alright I'll take the Red Devil see whats stirrin there. Tommy you take the Autoshop and Dax you stay here and patrol the Tunnel." The Warchief said. The Turnbulls then all seperated and went to their patrol points. Dax started strolling up and down the Tunnel not expecting to find anything. He started talking to himself
"Man i hate this patrolling shit! When I joined the Bulls I though it would be all boppin and women. But no we have to walk around in the cold looking for people who aren't here." He said to himself
"Man thet is one messed up dude" Snow said quietly " Alright guys hold up a sec. I'm onna take this chump out." Dax continued to walk aimlessly around the tunnel and SNow waited for the ideal time to make his move. The AC came within five yards of the Warrior's hiding place and Snow decided to make his move. He most with so much speed that the execution was over in seconds. Snow jumped up from his crouching position and as if all in one movement opened up his switchblade and plunged it into Dax's neck. The Turnbull never even had time to scream.
"Alright guys lets move we gotta get closer to the AC's hangout now. Its all goin down pretty soon.

End of part 3. Hope you like it!

[cowboy rules]

OK PART 4! Were nearly finished the second chapter here guys! I hope you enjoy reading it

The train pulled into Gunhill Station at 7:20.
"Alright lets get moving. We gotta get there by 8" Swan said
"Yo Warchief! I aint so sure about this man. I've heard things. These Turnbulls are fucking maniacs" A TJ said to Swan
"You scared soldier? 'Cause if you're scared of of a brawl. You dont belong in the Warriors" Swan said in a quite voice. They did'nt have time for this.
"Naw I aint scared.....just gettin the jitters Warlord" TJ replied almost fearfully
"OK the stop complainin and lets get to the AC hangout" Swan replied to his war party. They walked out of the station looking for AC patrols, just as their friends had done an hour ago. There was no one in sight. The gang moved with speed in the direction of the AC hangout, they knew it was going to turn rough pretty soon.

The AC hangout was musky and smelled of stale cigarette smoke and beer. Just the way they liked it.
"Come on Warlord those Warriors aint gonna be here. There chicken shits!" A frustrated Turnbull LT complained to his leader
"YOU SHUT THE FUCK UP!" The Paranoid Warlord shouted at his Lt." IF IT WASN'T FOR YOU CONVINCING ME TO DO WHAT WE DID A WOULD'NT BE IN THIS MESS! YOU KNOW WHAT THEY CAN DO! YOU HEARD WHAT WAS SAID ON THAT GODDAMN RADIO!.........get the hell outta my sight. And get more patrols out there!" The Leader said to the Lt. grabbing his 4th beer in 20 minutes.

Cowboy's party was approaching Gunhill when they saw the green school bus cruising around the streets looking for trouble. The Warriors were quick to hide in the shrubery, out of sight of the AC's. When they had passed Cowboy spoke to his soldiers.
"Alright. We should be there in five minutes but we gotta step on it. I dont wanna be late for this thing" He told the Warriors as they set off at an even faster pace than they had been

"There it is" Snow stated as they came in sight of the Hangout." We gotta wait here for the other two parties. Just hang tight, they should'nt be long". Snow examined the faces of his war party , made up of Newbloods. They had done pretty well so far and he was proud of them. He was proud to call them his brothers. But he could see the anxiety building up in their faces as they realised that they ,might not come out of the Turnbulls hangout.
" Hey guys. I wanna talk to you. Not as your Warchief though. As a brotha. I'm proud of all of you. You done well tonight. Now I know these guys are heavy. But there all about intimidation. They shave their hair off to look scary. But were the Cone Island Warriors guys. Were the best. Were the best in the whole of fuckin New York. And if were gonna be beatebn by anyone.....it sure as hell wont be these skinheaded assholes.Now I want you all to go in there and give em hell. You got that" Snow said to his Party. They all nodded in agreement. He was a good Warchief, they all thought as their spirits were raised higher than ever. Just then Snow spotted a small group creeping their way up the road. It was Swans war party.
"You guys have any trouble?" Swan asked when they got there
"Naw, only had to waste one patroller" Snow replied.
"Alright. Weres Cowboy?" Swan asked
"Aint here yet" Snow told him
"Shit. He might be in trouble" Swan said
"Hey guys" Cowboys voice came from behind them.
"Where the hell have you been?" Swan asked
"Train got stopped. We had to walk from 96th street station. Had to bop past the Punks too. Were all ok though" Cowboy told them
"Alright. We already?" Swan asked his Warriors. There were around 30 of them now.
" Yeah lets go" Cochise replied
"OK. Lets wasted these hairless queers and burn that fuckin place to the ground" Swan told them "Reambrandt, tag this joint. Its gonna be the first of many little man"

End of Part 4 AND Chapter 2! Chapter 3 on the way soon boppers. Stay tuned

[cowboy rules]

OK Heres The Next and Last Chapter of my Fan Fic! Hope you all like it.

Part 1: The AC Hnagout was quite a small , rundown building that had been abandoned long ago. It stood on the corner of one of the backroads.It was hard to find, but after seeing four Ac's walking in the side door of the building the Warriors figured they had found it. They stayed hidden, surveying the building and realised that it was not going to be easy getting in. The AC patrols were heavily guarding their hangout. Altogether Swan counted 19 soldiers patrolling the outside but he was sure there would be more. He had sent Snow and Mark, a newblood who was in his war party, to go and see how they could get in. Snow returned with mark about fifteen minutes after they had left
"Warchief theres a set of stairs round the back that leads to a door and theres a door below that to" Snow whispered to Swan
"Any idea what this building used to be used for?" Swan asked trying to figure out what it would look like inside
"By the looks of it, I think it used to be apartments. It dont look like anything fancy" Snow told him
"Alright. Cowboy take your war party round to the door on the stairs. Snow you take your party to the other door. We'll go in the door over there" He said pointing to the door they were nearest." Now dont get caught! Your gonna have to take out their patrols to get their but by the looks of things there should be plenty of places to hide so it should'nt be that hard.If any of you get caught, were all fucked! So dont screw this up!" He told them. They then went their seperate ways to try and get into the hangout.

Part 1 is fairly short but theres still more to come. Stay tuned

[Jigsaw]

That's better than mine

[Baby Joker]

OK Heres The Next and Last Chapter of my Fan Fic! Hope you all like it.

Part 1: The AC Hnagout was quite a small , rundown building that had been abandoned long ago. It stood on the corner of one of the backroads.It was hard to find, but after seeing four Ac's walking in the side door of the building the Warriors figured they had found it. They stayed hidden, surveying the building and realised that it was not going to be easy getting in. The AC patrols were heavily guarding their hangout. Altogether Swan counted 19 soldiers patrolling the outside but he was sure there would be more. He had sent Snow and Mark, a newblood who was in his war party, to go and see how they could get in. Snow returned with mark about fifteen minutes after they had left
"Warchief theres a set of stairs round the back that leads to a door and theres a door below that to" Snow whispered to Swan
"Any idea what this building used to be used for?" Swan asked trying to figure out what it would look like inside
"By the looks of it, I think it used to be apartments. It dont look like anything fancy" Snow told him
"Alright. Cowboy take your war party round to the door on the stairs. Snow you take your party to the other door. We'll go in the door over there" He said pointing to the door they were nearest." Now dont get caught! Your gonna have to take out their patrols to get their but by the looks of things there should be plenty of places to hide so it should'nt be that hard.If any of you get caught, were all [bad word deleted]ed! So dont screw this up!" He told them. They then went their seperate ways to try and get into the hangout.

Part 1 is fairly short but theres still more to come. Stay tuned

That's pretty good. You got some real talent there. =D>
To answer your question, just click "modify" at the corner of ur post and where it says subject, edit the title.

[cowboy rules]

Holy crap. I forgot about this Fan Fic completly! I'll have to update when I get time.

[Baby Joker]

Holy crap. I forgot about this Fan Fic completly! I'll have to update when I get time.

"Duuurr thank you Baby Joker." "I appreciate it dearly..."

lol jk just joshing