cleon and cochise.

[big c.i]

this is my first time writing some fan fic so at the end tell me what you think.
part 1.cleon meets cochise.

it was a sunday morning in harlem.there was a man walking around with nothing to do.then a few men dressed in purple vests came around the corner holding a man that had had the life beat out of him.they dropped him on the floor near a bin and continued to kick the man.the man that was watching shouted hey and ran over.he kicked one in the balls and sent him to his knees he then punched him in the face and left him there.he went for the second.the second one swang a kick at him but he ducked and has he came beck up he punched him so hard in the jaw that he broke it.the last one pulled out a knife and pointed it towards the man.he held the helping man up against the wall slowly thrusting the knife towards his neck.then someone shouted duck.so he did.then the man who they had beaten up rammed his head into the wall killing him instantly.
once the fight was over the man who had been battered by them said hey im cochise whats your name.
cleon the man replied.
who were them and why did they gey you.cleon asked.
they are the boppers and they jumped me from behind.i hate them.they wasted my mum and dad so i got some beef with them.cochise told him.
you look a bit banged up cochise why dont you come and stay with me for a while.just till you recover.cleon said to him.
why not.youlle need me because they gonna be after your ass now.cochise said.

so what do you think and be honest. i know its short but hey its easier to keep up with. i will be back with more later.btw can you swear in fan fic.

[Zen444]

this is my first time writing some fan fic so at the end tell me what you think.
part 1.cleon meets cochise.
so what do you think and be honest. i know its short but hey its easier to keep up with. i will be back with more later.btw can you swear in fan fic.

The Warriors do, so yes.

It was a sunday morning in a cold Harlem. There was a man walking around with nothing to do.

Then a few men dressed in purple vests came around the corner holding a man that had had the life beat out of him.

They threw him up a against a dumpster and continued to kick the man.

The man that was watching shouted

"Hey!" and ran over.

He kicked one in the balls and sent him to his knees he then punched him in the face and left him there, he went for the second one, the purple youth swang a kick at him but he ducked and has he came back up he punched him so hard in the jaw that he broke it, the last one pulled out a knife and pointed it towards the man.

He held the helping man up against the wall slowly thrusting the knife towards his neck, then someone shouted duck. So he did, then the man who they had beaten up rammed his head into the wall killing him or giving him a concussion, they weren't sure.

Once the fight was over the man who had been battered by them said "Cochise is the name, yours?"

"Cleon" the man replied.

"Who were those guys and why did they try and bop you?"

"They're the Boppers and they jumped me. I hate them, they wasted my mom and dad so I gotta a beef with them."

"You look a bit banged up Cochise why dont you come and stay with me for a while. just till you recover."

"Why not. You'll need some back up, they're gonna be after your ass now."

PS: You don't have to constantly end talking with "he replied" or any of that. If two people are talking, you'll know who it is.

[big c.i]

so did you like it.
and i will write it how you have presented it.thank you for the advice

[Vermin16]

not bad i guess

[Manson-Cryptorchild]

It's not too bad for your first time. Go ahead and write more, if you would like. I would like to see more of your writing skills. See how creative you can be!

[big c.i]

i was actually in my local newspaper for my writing skills.thats why i thought i would try this.

[big c.i]

Part 2; "You guys are gonna burn!"

Cleon and Cochise were alseep at Cleon's house.
Cleon was awaken by a loud smashing noise outside. He got up and walked to the
window, and looked out just to see about 5-6 Boppers waiting outside.

He quickly woke up Cochise and they made their way outside. "What do the hell do
you wimps want?!", shouted Cleon, "You dead!".

One of the Boppers threw a brick at Cleon, but he caught it one-handed, just in
time before it was able to hit him. He then threw it back at the Bopper who had
tried to throw the rock at him, hitting him between the eyes and killing him.

"You're in for now, punks!", a Bopper shouted.

They started brawling. Another Bopper had a brick, and threw it at Cochise.
Cochise ducked and spin-kicked the Bopper and broke his jaw. Cleon was punching
one Bopper in the face continually and a Bopper behind him threw a Molotov
Cocktail at him and set him on fire.cochise was quick to help him and bottled
the bopper who had threw the molotov cocktail.the bopper was down and so was
cleon. He was burning and there was still two Boppers that needed wasted.
Cochise looked around frantically lookin for anything that could help put out
the fire, and then he saw that the window cleaner had left his bucket of water,
so he then grabbed it and poured the water on Cleon, and the fire eventully went
out. Cochise turned around, only to be hit with a brick. Cochise was down and he
was going to be killed by the two Boppers and cleon couldnt do anything to help.
The Boppers closed in on Cochise, holding another brick, the brick that would
finish off Cochise.Cleon struggled to get up, but he couldn't. Then Cleon saw
it....a baseball. He grabbed it and threw it at the balls of the brick weilding
bopper. The Bopper crouched over in pain and Cochise head-butted him, sending
him down to the ground. Cleon still couldn't get up. The last Bopper was no
problem, as Cochise pinned him up against a wall and punched the living
daylights out of the him.

He then helped Cleon up and helped him back inside the house.

He layed him on the sofa. Cleon couldnt walk because, of the burns. Cochise got
Cleon a bear and one for himself. They talked about the thrashing they gave the
Boppers.

[Manson-Cryptorchild]

Your creativity is good. But you're not writing it in the proper form. I also see that you're making some spelling mistakes. If you would like, I will help you out, and start editing your work - that is if you plan on writing more Fan Fiction. So if you would like me to begin editing, you can Personal Messege or E-mail the story to me for me to edit it, and I'll send it back for you to post it. P.M. me with your answer.