warriors poem

[All Grown Up]

Part 1: The Warriors

here they are
ready to fight
from rage to rage,
from night to night.
The warriors prepare
for there story to unfold
they do not know,
for there story is untold.
Here the are
ready to fight,
for they are the armies
of the night.

[Scotty Rave]

Short but very, very good. Maybe you could do a couple of lines to a stanza about each Warrior?

[Vermin16]

dont quit your day job cyrus123

[All Grown Up]

Part 2: Cleon

Here he is
filled with rage,
here he is
to turn the page.
his skill in fighting
is a skill unmatched,
but a skill worth having
is a skill unmasked.
For his time is up,
his time to go.
His story has been told,
his story we now know.
Here he is
filled with rage,
here he is
to turn the page.

[MiddleMan07]

dont quit your day job cyrus123

Thats not constructive critiscm man.. dont bad mouth his poems as there really good, probably better than you could ever do.

[Jigsaw]

dont quit your day job cyrus123

I'd also like to say that Cyrus123's poems are great, and if he's been here long enough to turn Jones Street Boys rank, then he shouldn't be taking crap from a Hi-hat.

[Sleeping Dragon]

Let me try.Be brutal

          Ajax

A true born fighter
Without any reason
Does Ajax care?
Not unless he believes it
He looks for fights
On all nights
He speaks his mind
Uncalled or kind
You think him perverted
And then you think
He can sure fight
He could make my legs link
Ajax sent the Furies quaking
Then he let his weakness take him
Perhaps next time
Ajax will think
A woman at night
Has a badge a hand-cuffing things!!

[cowboy rules]

dont quit your day job cyrus123

If you're not going to say anything constuctive then please dont say anything at all!    I personally think cyrus123's poems are great and sleeping dragon's one was great too.

[Vermin16]

nobody can take a joke around here

[All Grown Up]

Part 3: Swan

is he ready
to assume this role,
a role that can crumble
a weak minds soul.
cleon is gone
his position is free,
the role of war chief
he is soon to be.
as heros fall
and legends rise,
he shall see the world
from a great minds eyes.

[Sleeping Dragon]

dont quit your day job cyrus123

If you're not going to say anything constuctive then please dont say anything at all!    I personally think cyrus123's poems are great and sleeping dragon's one was great too.

thanks dude

[Jigsaw]

I gots one !

Vermin

Loyal to the end,
Sacrafice in front of a gun,
Even when in danger,
He comes out having fun,
He's funny, he's crazy,
He always complains,
But when a fight begins,
He never refrains,
Vermin is loyal,
Vermin is great,
He'll stay with the Warriors,
'Til he is 78!

[Jigsaw]

I gots one !

Vermin

Loyal to the end,
Sacrafice in front of a gun,
Even when in danger,
He comes out having fun,
He's funny, he's crazy,
He always complains,
But when a fight begins,
He never refrains,
Vermin is loyal,
Vermin is great,
He'll stay with the Warriors,
'Til he is 78!

Guess I'm not the only one who thought it came out weird eh? :badgrin: heh heh..

[All Grown Up]

Part 4: Ajax

Fists are balled
head hung high
for he is prepared
for fists to fly.
He could not
see his fate,
if not for that lady on the bench
his time would be late.
For they would know
he opened the gate,
but they all knew
they had lost a great.

[Sleeping Dragon]

ingenious!!I'll give karma(If this is how I do it)